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Entry: They Might Be Giants - the Band - A19490664
Author: Wyatt... [Scout/Sub-Editor] - U1779623


This is my first Update. The original Entry isn't that bad, considering it's from 2000, but it does lack details and is pretty out of date, since the band is still active.

I can't really think of much else to add to the Entry, so I'm going ahead and submitting it now.

Didn't they get a Grammy for something? Boss of Me, I think. I think it was in 2004 (it's stuck in my head as 20 years after they formed).

Mink Car, annoyingly, appeared in a somewhat different version in the UK. Without Mr Excitement and several other tracks. I'd still like to know why, but that's probably outside the scope of the entry to handle.

The one thing that annoys me most about this entry is that I've looked at the original occasionally, and considered updating it, but never got around to it. You beat me to it. Darn.

Nicely done, dagnabit.


Geggs

I mentioned the Boss of Me Grammy. I belive it's in a Footnote.

I just added a bit about the UK version of Mink Car. I had already heard about that elsewhere, and forgot to include it in the Entry, but you reminded me.

>>I mentioned the Boss of Me Grammy. I believe it's in a Footnote.

So you did. And now I feel like a fool for mentioning it. Oh well.


Geggs

Don't feel bad, I often skip over Footnotes, also.

I see you are still calling yourself Mr. Scrambles.

Hi Wyatt, good of you to tackle this update.

Some minor points (in order of appearance):

* quite intellegent -> quite intelligent
* accordian, keyboards, -> accordion, keyboards,
* so they usually have to compatible with him -> so they usually have to be compatible with him
* such as drummers and bass players -> such as drummers and bass players.
* a fair number music videos -> a fair number of music videos
* basiclly -> basically
* Giantheads [..] see it not only -> Giantheads [..] sees it not only
* one being specially so children can attend -> one being especially for children.^
* 'Experimental Film' (see below) -> Is the 'see below' part still missing?

Updated!

Anything else?

You should provide the A number of the original entry in this conversation, so that we can compare the two of them.

The original entry is at A256763.

I did put a link to the original at the top of this Entry.

Sorry I haven't got around to looking at this yet. I'll try and look at it over the next day or two and let you know what I think.

saxaphones --> saxophones

humourous --> humorous

The sentence "They even lived in the same apartment building in Brooklyn" would be better if you moved it to before the one that starts "However, they didn't officially..."

accordian --> accordion

saxaphone --> saxophone

made in to a movie --> made into a movie

dressed uniform in jeans --> dressed uniformly in jeans

there is a number of 'Puppet Stuff' videos -- I'm always unsure about this particular grammar point, but I think it should be "there _are_ a number of videos"

but who died of exhaustion at the end of such a competition
-->
but who died of exhaustion at the end of one such competition

and 'Till My Head Falls Off', about losing your memory and your mind, and 'Metal Detector'.

The first "and" shouldn't be there because of the second "and".

whimsicle --> whimsical

which is illustrated to four of their songs -- this doesn't sound right, and I don't quite know what you meant by it.

the singing saw, Theremin -- this suggests that Theremin is a singing saw. You need to phrase this in such a way that it is obvious that the Theremin and the singing saw are two different things. You could say: a singing saw, a Theremin and...



It's 1 am now, so I'm going to bed...

Dealt with all those.

langauge --> language

I think this looks pretty good! How do you feel? Is it ready to go?

What do other people think?

I can't think of anything else to do to it, so I'd say it's ready.

OK. I've done the update, so your version is now the official Edited Entry at A256763. I'll notify the editors and they'll promote it on the front page soon.

Thanks!!