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Hi Mina. I'm subbing "Assistance Dogs International", at A62229396. I've run into a slight problem with it, which you could help me with. At the start you say that the organisation is made up of three groups - two of the groups have the proper names, "Guide Dogs" and "Hearing Dogs for the Deaf" which are the same names as on those two organisations' websites. But the third group is more of a description than the name of a group. When I look at the Assistance Dogs International website, they seem to have a lot more member organisations than just three.

Am I missing something? Or did you not intend "three organisations" when you said "three groups"?

Sorry, I don't use this account, only for the actual entries so didn't see your message, subbed to the mc now.

I used the word 'groups' because I didn't know what else to call them. As you say there are more orgs than just 3, but there are 3 types of assistance dogs, for sight, hearing and pretty much everthing else.

If you can think of some other way to describe it, that's fine. I got stuck, but I want to keep it as just the three 'types' on that first list. It doesn't have to be the names of the orgs for the first two, but if you do change it I'd like to have a look at it before it goes back to Eds please.

It certainly shouldn't be the names of organisations for the first two types, if types is what you meant. I will change it. I'll let you know what I come up with before I send it back.

I changed the start slightly. Are you happy with that?

Looks great, thank you (just read the start).

Did spot a capital B had crept into Guide Dogs for the Blind - the name of the org is just 'Guide Dogs' so no need for the capital on blind.

Ah I see. I've changed it again slightly, taking the names of the organisations out of the three types, and putting them into the descriptions of the types later on. There should be a clear distinction between a type of dog and the organisation that looks after that dog. That's why the readers were so confused about this in Peer Review.

I think it is sorted now.

Sorry, just done a bit of looking into the name of the guide dogs, and from their website:

Guide Dogs is a working name of the Guide Dogs for the Blind Association, a registered charity in England and Wales (209617) and Scotland (SCO38979)

Does that make a difference to this bit:

"Guide Dogs for the Blind, now known simply as Guide Dogs"

Otherwise, lovely, thank you.

OK, another attempt. I now say:

The Guide Dogs for the Blind Association, now working under the simpler title of Guide Dogs, were the first service dog organisation in the UK and have been running for over 70 years.

OK, I'm sending this back now.

for sorting that out.