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Horatio Hornblower - sub-editor calling
h5ringer Started conversation Nov 12, 2012
Hi FS. I'm sub-editing your fine Entry on Horatio Hornblower, Royal Navy. The edited version is at A87772909. All the changes I'be made have been minor things, but have a read through and let know here if you are satisfied. When I hear from you, I will move it forward towards the FP.
Thanks
h5
Horatio Hornblower - sub-editor calling
Florida Sailor All is well with the world Posted Nov 13, 2012
There is something about reading the final edit that makes small things spring to life
The story that eventually evolves is that of a small boy1 with no friends or connections who rises to Lord Admiral of the Navy.
Should be
The story, that eventually evolves, is that of a small boy1 with no friends or connections who rises to Lord Admiral of the Navy.
Adding the two commas
I love your 'Irish Problem' link. Actually exactly what I wanted to say!
Hopefully we we will have a better link for 'Lord Nelson' soon, if I can get my entry through Peer Review, but that is not your concern.
Ship of the Line
For several days he follows the French ships until at last the frigate is sighted again on the horizon. Believing the squadron is near, and seeing a protected harbour is near, he sets all sail and closes with the enemy against impossible odds.
Might be better as
For several days he follows the French ships until at last the frigate is sighted again on the horizon. Believing the squadron is near, and seeing a protected harbour is also near, he sets all sail and closes with the enemy against impossible odds.
Added the word also to avoid near ... near
Thanks for your fine work! Great links.
FS
Horatio Hornblower - sub-editor calling
h5ringer Posted Nov 13, 2012
changes made
When Lord Nelson gets FP coverage we can curate this Entry to link to it.
Look forward to seeing this one on the FP. Hopefully, the Artists will produce something imaginative to illustrate it.
Thanks and keep contributing to the Guide FS.
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