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silversmoke Started conversation Nov 14, 2003
sorry for invading your space
my names neil ive just noticed your writings on your page,would you do me a favour ive just written
this and was wondering if you could possibly rip it apart for me its the first thing ive done feel free to trash it
I cannot breathe whilst bent down on one knee
I cannot see but i know i am not blind
I am just a child of a longed for Palastine
I play with stones just for fun
but Israelies keep watch with glistening guns
This is my home but ive nowhere to roam
I am just a child of a choking Palastine
My friends are not here havent been for years
Just my brothers and my muched missed sister
The Israelies kept watch they didnt miss her
She was throwing stones just passing the time
And i am just a child of a choking Palastine
They laughed and they joke and us children we choke
We struggle to breathe as they go round in threes
They round us all up and we drop to are knees
But i am just a child of some occupying disease
I cannot breathe whilst bent down on one knee
HOPE ITS NOT TO MUCH TROUBLE
Midnight Angel (ACE / G~A / GODDESS) Posted Nov 14, 2003
hello Neil.
Firstly i would just like to say you are not invadeing my space.
you are more than welcome to come on my space at any time you wish.
It doesn't matter if you come just to look around check out some links,ask my opinion/questions on things. or just to have a chat,it realy dont matter your more than welcome.
Right then to the matter in hand.
The poem it self i found very good and intresting nothing to rip apart (as you put it)
What do you intend on doing with it?
If you are thinking of putting it on your personal space i think you would be better doing it as a Journal entry that way.it will be on your personal space,and anyone who as you on there pals list will also recieve it.
I think you will get some feed back on what you wrote.
As i say i think its very good as a poem,
i was shocked to go to your personal space finding you came from here UK with a piece like that.
Thats all i realy have to say.
Hope its what you wanted to hear.
if you want to know anything else then please feel free to ask.
MA<./>ACE</.>
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