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BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

David, You're Editing my Wiltshire' Entry at A6672468.
Is it too late for you to put in a link to the 'Madonna' Entry, currently on the FP at A6959307?.

smiley - ta

smiley - biggrin


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BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

P.S.

Ref my sentence, 'Sting and his partner, the actress and film producer, Trudie Styler have had a family home at Lake House, in the picturesque hamlet of Wilsford-cum-Lake, in the Woodford Valley, just outside Salisbury'.


I was wonderining whether to reinforce this my saying,

All three of their children attended a prepatatory school in Salisbury before moving on to senior schools'.

What do you think? (I'd have to check on the number of children he hays. I know 43 of them went to the said school, but I've a feeling he may have four)


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David B - Singing Librarian Owl

Hi BigAl, it's not too late at all! In fact, I haven't even had a chance to look at it yet, so I will definitely incorporate those points. I hope to be able to do some subbing tomorrow (only here for a flying visit at the mo).

David


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BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

smiley - erm '...know 43 of them went to the said school' I meant to say '3 of them' smiley - blush


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Post 5

David B - Singing Librarian Owl

I thought so! I've been attacked by the typo smiley - monster tonight as well. smiley - erm


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Post 6

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

smiley - erm I've just noticed that I've spelt Preseli (hills/mountains) at least two different ways. Please could you standardise it as Preseli, as this is the spelling that gets most hits when I 'Google' it (163,000). The other two variants only get 250 or so hits.

smiley - ta


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BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

To help you find them, the two 'incorrect' spellings I used were

'Prescelly' and 'Preselli'.

smiley - ta


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Post 8

David B - Singing Librarian Owl

Right. I have attended to those issues. smiley - smiley I haven't mentioned Sting's kiddies, as the number is still uncertain, and it's not all that important. However, if you desperately want it in, I'll include it.

I need to give this a properly thorough read-through now. It doesn't look as though I'll have to do much work at all. If I do, I shall come back and post here to let you know so that you can either agree with what I've done, or poke me with a pointy stick.

David


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Post 9

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

smiley - ok Agree with what you say about Sting's kiddies. Only reason I considered putting them in at all is that it might reinforce the fact that his Wiltshire home is his most important one. smiley - shrug


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Post 10

David B - Singing Librarian Owl

I think referring to it as the family home, rather than just a home or a house, reinforces that point subliminally. smiley - smiley I have been through it once. Not much changed at all. A few commas added and subtracted and a couple of very minor changes to the word order in some sentences. I shall give it another read-through tomorrow (if my rehearsal finishes early) or Wednesday (if it doesn't) before sending it back to the editors.

David


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Post 11

BigAl Patron Saint of Left Handers Keeper of the Glowing Pickle and Monobrows

smiley - oksmiley - cheers David.

smiley - smiley


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