h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hiya Geggs

I'm the sub-ed for your Entry, the recommended version is A87809115 so don't forget to subscribe

I've just started so I'll post any comments, queries here, you can put the kettle on if you like, I may be some time between loggings-in

GB

OK I'm done subbing, if you'd like to OK it I'll return it to the Eds for final polish

GB

Thanks GB. I'll have a look at it this evening.


Geggs

Just spotted a typo..

"Within a few years homes where built on the north border,"

I think that should be were rather than where.


Geggs

I need to correct some facts too, which I mis-understood when writing the entry. The figure of 192 causalities covers all those injured in the battle as well as the lives lost. There were actually 34 dead, making 158 injured. Could you make this clear in the paragraph about the battle, please?


Geggs

No problem, try that

GB

That's great, GB, thanks.

I'm happy with this going to the Eds now.


Geggs

Just checking: does "Black cobbles represent the 192 Worcester casualties of Gheluvelt and the grey cobbles, the 165 survivors" need adjusting as well?

Haha

The numbers still stand, but perhaps it should be unharmed, or similar, rather than survivors.


Geggs

"and the grey cobbles, the 165 who returned unharmed in body, if not mind." How does that sound? Because I never met an old soldier not living with horrendous memories of the brutality of war. My own father was one, he found a dying soldier and gave him his own supply of chocolate, then ran 2 miles to find a medic. Later he was injured himself, and carried the bullet in his lung for the rest of his life. He still said that leaving behind a dying comrade caused him more pain, to the end of his own life

Yes, I like that. It keeps the sombre tone that I was aiming for. Thank you.


Geggs

My pleasure it's pending now see you on the Front Page!

GB