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The Great Rock Cycle
Rho Started conversation Jan 6, 2004
Hi Ukkeli,
I've finished subediting your entry 'The Great Rock Cycle', A1913492. Are there any changes that you'd like me to make before I return it to the Editors? 
Rho
The Great Rock Cycle
Ukkeli, Keeper of Article Free English Posted Jan 9, 2004
Hi,
just this one "If an eruption occurs to form ash flows....". At least to me (no native English speaker and geologist) word "occur" occurs in funny place. It gives too "random" feeling, like magma could decide, "hey, I feel like forming ash flows today!".
Or it could be me, that had to find something to nag about in otherwise very nice editing work. But I would vote for phrasing it :"If an eruption forms ash flows..."
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Rho Posted Jan 9, 2004
How about "If an eruption causes ash flows and other pyroclastic deposits to form"?
Rho
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