h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

I'll be subbing your recently reccomended entry, you can see my work in progress here A1051633 if you see anything you don't like please do let me know and I won't return it until we can agree on a final draft

Hi Z! {is that zed or zee? )

I've had a read over and have no objections... but I've seen some things that I'd like to change to make it read a bit better. Sloppy writing on my part (but sloppiness is a virtue.. I'm convinced of it. )

If you'd be so kind... it's only three small cut and paste jobs....

1) Remove "very" from "very short book" in the Viceroy of Ouidah section as I had already used "very short" was used in the previous paragraph. In fact, it could change to "brief book" or something similar.

2) Could you alter the first paragraph of On the Black Hill to:

"Next Chatwin chose to write a book contrary to what was expected of him as a chronicler of travels and exotic places: a story of two brothers who rarely leave the farm where they were born. On the Black Hill concerns Lewis and Benjamin Jones born and raised in the hills of Wales bordering England. He had known this area well as a child and many of the characters in the novel are based on figures from his childhood and those he met while researching the book."

3) And in the footnote concerning Flaubert:

"He is referring to Flaubert’s The Dictionary of Received Ideas, a notebook kept by the French author and filled with snatches of peoples' lives, conversations and observations of provincial French life. Many of these notes made their way into his books."


Thanks a lot!

deemikay

PS I'm glad about the housetraining.... it saves money on air freshner.

Ok I'll make a start on it! I've done some changes already, but certainly hadn't finished my side of it..

And that's Zed not Zee! I'll have to put that on my User page.

I've just finished now! what do you think

Hi

This seems fine to me.

The only thing I'd point out is a few rogue ?'s where apostrophes should be (that might just be my browser though).

thanks!
deemikay

I was doing it offline! and it must have turned it into it, when I cut and pasted into word for a spell check

Sorted! shall I press the big red button to return to the editors!