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Johanna the Psychotic Bananna - - I'm back!!! I missed you, H2G2

hi! im johanna and i was told that you are one of the best at writing short stories! so i just thought id come and ask for one! incidentally, i am a year younger than you!


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Post 2

Phoenix

Hi Johanna. My brother told me about your problem and I would suggest that you think about the location of the sand dune ie. can you hear the sea from it? Also, talk about the way the moonlight reflects off the sand, how dark it is, if there are stars, what the beach is like etc.

Hope this helps.

P.S My brother and I would like to know what this story is about- feel like telling us? Entirely up to you of course.


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Johanna the Psychotic Bananna - - I'm back!!! I missed you, H2G2

of couse Phoenix heres a brief summarysmiley - sadfacei wont go into he fidgetty details)
theres a girl on a hill top crying and a boy at the bottom and she thinks back to a yaer ago when she was younger and she had told him that she was going away.
then she flashes back to the earlier avents of the night and to juat after a beach party and they are lying on a moonlit sand dune aand se suddenly tells him that she has to go and she is leaving tommorow and runs off to the forementiond hillwhere he follows her to and they sit in this tree and cry together and then she leaves, never to see her best friend again.
its better when its the full story!
it doesnt sound very good here bu it is 2 and a half pages long in practice!
thanx


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Post 4

Phoenix

Sorry I haven't got back to you. I've been pretty busy. That sounds like a really good story. Is that just part of it, or is it the whole thing? At the moment, I'm writing a sort of James Bond story but I haven't got very far yet.

Keep on writing,

Phoenix


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Post 5

Johanna the Psychotic Bananna - - I'm back!!! I missed you, H2G2

thats the whole story
when you are finished ur story u wanna e-mail me it? i think ur brother has my address either that or im confused again...
smiley - towel
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Post 6

Phoenix

I would e - mail it to you but my last story was about 18 pages and I expect this one to be about the same, -probably longer so it depends if you still want to read it.

Phoenix


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Johanna the Psychotic Bananna - - I'm back!!! I missed you, H2G2

course i want to reed it! it sounds gr8
ive never been able to write more than 5 pages in a story and i would love to see yours!
smiley - towel
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Post 8

Phoenix

OK. I'll try to send it to you but it will probably take a while. I'll try to send it at the weekend. Andy willl tell me your e mail adress and I'll try to send it. Be ready for a long read! How's your story coming on?

Phoenix


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Post 9

Johanna the Psychotic Bananna - - I'm back!!! I missed you, H2G2

sorry ive been away 4 a while! I handed in my story and got a b/c in english for it. Hows ur story going?

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smiley - towel


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Post 10

Johanna the Psychotic Bananna - - I'm back!!! I missed you, H2G2

hey! we aint talked 4 ages! have you finished ur story yet???

wot u been up 2

where's andy been? he didnt answer my e-mail

anyway, mail me back
smiley - towel
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