h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

I would like to put forward my entry on the King of Rock & Pop;

http://www.h2g2.com/A466445

and also a related entry on Moon-Walking;

http://www.h2g2.com/A472925


Thankyou in advance for your reviews/criticism

I really like the Micheal Jackson entry, although I think the jokes distract rather than add to the article.

The moon-walk entry could use with some more description, I think. *I* know what it's talking about because I grew up trying to moonwalk. But I think someone who'd never seen it before could read the entry and still have no clue what you're talking about.

just my 2 cents.

mikey

I think the Michael Jackson article should be laid out slightly differently. Instead of launching in the second paragraph into media attacks, this should be put at the end. The article should be about Jackson and his music. It might be worthwhile listing some of the songs and albums which brought him up the ladder to his position at the top as "King of Rock and Pop". For example, you should definitely mention the "Thriller" video, which really did change the face of the Music Video industry and made Jackson a household name among young people of the time. End with a small section on how he has been hounded by the media but is still the best.

A billion in America is a thousand million, not a hundred million, so you comment about billion should be removed.

Mikey - thanks, I will expand on the Moon-Walk although my few attempts at describing it so far have been fairly incomprehensible!

Gnomon - thankyou also, I will endeavour to make more of his achievments but I think I may keep the order essentially as it is - I would expect the perception of the majority would be based on media articles and so this should be confronted first (although perhaps in less confrontational style).

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Right then - Michael Jackson article is reworked and now has brief reviews of Off the Wall, Thriller and Bad before a bit about the media and then his latest stuff. I think this now reads a lot better and the order is roughly chronological - thanks for your input so far

The Moon-Walking entry now has a step by step guide

MoonWalk entry now also has a link to a ReadVideo clip of the Motown 25 performance

Is this legal??

>Is this legal??

No. The only way it would even theoretically be legal would be if you linked to the site of whomever owns the footage (in this case, possibly NBC or a production company) who happened to have the realvideo clip on their site. By linking directly to any image or video clip, you are implying that you have ownership or access permission to the rights of the image/clip.

Dagnabit.

Taken it off.

Editorial Note: This Conversation has been moved to the Peer Review Sin Bin because it recommends two entries, and that's not allowed.

However, we'd love it if you could start up two threads in the Peer Review system, one for each entry, as this isn't a comment on the entries, just the format in which they were put into Peer Review.

I had done already. Thanks for your prompt response

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Back to User Page as this is about 2 entries. These both became Edited:
A537662 Michael Jackson - Singer/Songwriter
A507250 The Moonwalk