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A47181756 - Ode to a silver back
Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups Started conversation Feb 8, 2009
Entry: Ode to a silver back - A47181756
Author: Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups - U231227
I have been watching the stretcher with some interest and was playing around with the word 'silver' until I came up with this.
A47181756 - Ode to a silver back
Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor Posted Feb 8, 2009
Was this poem intended satirically?
If not, you shouldn't use 'between you and I', because it is grammatically incorrect.
It is 'between you and me'.
A47181756 - Ode to a silver back
Opticalillusion- media mynx life would be boring without hiccups Posted Feb 8, 2009
uh oh I sense technicality here 
It is written with fun. 
A47181756 - Ode to a silver back
Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor Posted Feb 8, 2009
That's why I asked if you wanted the poem to be understood seriously or not.
If we're supposed to laugh at the poem with its absurd imagery (heavenly claws, etc), then it adds to the hilarity if you leave in really bad grammar like that.
Just as you worry about the commas, hyperlinks, and GuideML in PR, over here we are worried about such 'technicalities' as tense, case, subject/verb agreement, rhythm, imagery...
Creative writing isn't a free-for-all with no rules. The choices change how the reader perceives what you're writing.
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