h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Description of a sinister street. . . - A38205740
Author: CommCorr - U1615166

So. . . What do you think?

This sounds like a great location for a ghost story.

However, I think the style is a bit overblown. Some of the sentences are over-long, e.g. the second, and the sentence beginning 'Although in the daytime'. I would also avoid talking about 'the nocturnal proprietor of the sky'- it risks sounding pretentious.

I agree that this is a great setting for a ghost story - in the style of MR James, EA Poe, or even Dickens.

I disagree about the nocturnal proprietor of the skies.

I think that phrase is just right for an hommage to the old-style stories.

I would pick at the word 'thwart', but only that you should say that the path is thwarted by the houses...meaning that the houses block movement, maybe...?

Yep, I was thrown by the use of thwarted too.
It reads like an introduction, the type where the narrrator at the end goes: 'And so it was and so it is that we find [enter name here] neervously eyeing the...blah, blah blah.'

I quite like it but wonder where it's going?