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A13215098 - Witch way now?
Ladye_Seagull Started conversation Jul 21, 2006
Entry: Witch way now? - A13215098
Author: ladye_seagull - U3731692
I hope I have submitted this to the correct place. If anyone wants to help me get the metre right all criticisms will be gratefully accepted. It took me quite a while to get the Guide ML all present and correct.
Thank you. 
Ladye Seagull.
A13215098 - Witch way now?
miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont Posted Jul 22, 2006
Excellent
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Ladye_Seagull Posted Jul 22, 2006
Very good? Excellent? Is that all you have to say? Come on guys and gals let's have a bit of criticism here....
A13215098 - Witch way now?
Wyatt Posted Jul 22, 2006
Alright, I hated it!
No, I'm just kidding.
I'll have to read it again....
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Wyatt Posted Jul 22, 2006
It sort of reminds me a little bit of Edward Lear.
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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont Posted Jul 22, 2006
The part which I think you should improve on is
Then she thought of old Cobby from the back of courts
"Do you want something painting, my handsome lass?
doesnt fit with the other lines.
apart from that excellent
A13215098 - Witch way now?
ChiKiSpirit Posted Jul 23, 2006
piece of writing. My neighbours saved a rabbit yesterday. When you say they shot the bunnies at the back, what did they shoot them with digital or movie?
A13215098 - Witch way now?
Ladye_Seagull Posted Jul 23, 2006
I have made a note of your comments and will change that part miraculous sofa I was getting quite tired when I was writing it and knew that there was something not right about it. Thank you for telling me.
W thank you for saying it sounds like Edward Lear, it is supposed to be
ChiKi, we may well have been talking about Playboy bunnies
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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont Posted Jul 29, 2006
So you too shoot playboy bunnies.
MURDER MURDER MURDER
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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont Posted Jul 30, 2006
ok
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A13215098 - Witch way now?
- 1: Ladye_Seagull (Jul 21, 2006)
- 2: Wyatt (Jul 21, 2006)
- 3: miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont (Jul 22, 2006)
- 4: Ladye_Seagull (Jul 22, 2006)
- 5: Wyatt (Jul 22, 2006)
- 6: Wyatt (Jul 22, 2006)
- 7: miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont (Jul 22, 2006)
- 8: ChiKiSpirit (Jul 23, 2006)
- 9: Ladye_Seagull (Jul 23, 2006)
- 10: miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont (Jul 29, 2006)
- 11: ChiKiSpirit (Jul 29, 2006)
- 12: Ladye_Seagull (Jul 30, 2006)
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