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A837489 - She loves me.......

Post 1

~TWIsTED~

Entry: She loves me....... - A837489
Author: ~TWIsTED~ - U203711

what d'you think?


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Post 2

There is only one thing worse than being Gosho, and that is not being Gosho

'Fraid I've never been able to get a handle on poetry, except for a few bits of narrative verse I had to study at school - Thomas the Rymer, The Ancient Mariner, and the one about "Lars Porsena of Clusium, by the nine gods he swore, that the great house of Tarquin should suffer wrong no more." Well, whatever you or I may think of the name 'Tarquin', fact is - if that's your moniker you're gonna slapped around in the playground pretty bad.

Well done though for putting it in the right place this time. I'll leave others to judge the artistic content.


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Post 3

~TWIsTED~

cheers peers, ill get the beers.


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a girl called Ben

I like this. I really like the imagery, and I also like the fact it isn't a Haiku, (a form of verse which I persistantly fail to 'get').

This is good, evocative, and says just not quite enough, which is the perfect amount.

I hope my fellow Underguiders like it as much as I do.

Ben


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Post 5

a girl called Ben

I still feel the same way about this, so I am bumping it up to the top of the forum for a while.

B


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Post 6

SomeMuppet

I like this to. It has good imagery and the rhthym is there.

This is ringing bells with me, I have seen something similar to this somewhere else. I'll have a loko for it and get back to you.


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Post 7

a girl called Ben

Please do. Though one of the things that I find depressing about writing poetry, is that no human emotion is unique and every love affair is a cliche. It makes it hard to be original.

I really respect you for doing the on-line searches to check stuff, KJ.

Ben


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Post 8

SomeMuppet

Nah I thought I'd seen something similar on another writing site I've been subscribed to for a while, but it was a little different.

As you say Ben, it's hard writing poetry about love, since every teenager and their dog has covered the emotions involved.

I do like this one. It is short and too the point with some nice imagery in there as well.

(so no searching, just revisiting old websites I know smiley - laugh)


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Post 9

~TWIsTED~

its about suicide, the stupidity of it all, how its easy to look back and see where you went wrong but not as easy to repair the damage....glad
you enjoyed it, T~


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Post 10

~TWIsTED~

...more words on my home page, been using PC for about a year so no new stuff, let me know if u like it, T~ smiley - smiley


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Post 11

a girl called Ben

Good to see you are still around, ~T~. So many of our good writers have left the building. I will take a look at some more of the stuff that no-one has talked about since last summer, and see what I think.#

Thanks for coming back to this thread.

B


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Post 12

CAC Continuum

Hi ~TWisTED~

This entry, along with 'Poetry Corner' A837434 has been selected to feature in an edition of the CAC Continuum. You can find the page at - A2211175

Thanks
Speckly


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