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A39823833 - Evacuees, Episode 6
Frank Parker Started conversation Aug 19, 2008
Entry: Evacuees, Episode 6 - A39823833
Author: Plotinlaois - U7843825
Another episode. The viewpoint has changed to that of the infant Sonny.
A39823833 - Evacuees, Episode 6
minorvogonpoet Posted Aug 20, 2008
I'm afraid it's the same general point 
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Take out the asides, such as the sentence beginning "Just as people alive in November 1963 know exactly what they were doing", and build up two vivid vignettes - the unexpected birth of the new sister and Christmas 1946. By all means include material about the hard winter that followed, but try to choose specific incidents, rather than general statements.
A39823833 - Evacuees, Episode 6
Frank Parker Posted Aug 20, 2008
Point taken - thanks!
I think I shall refrain from posting any more and get to work doing some serious re-writing.
A39823833 - Evacuees, Episode 6
Dmitri Gheorgheni, Post Editor Posted Aug 20, 2008
I think that's a really good idea.
My suggestion would be to take one of these chapters and work on it, then resubmit it (and only it), for advice on the technique.
Then you could see what works and what doesn't, applying that to the rest of the writing.
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