h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Mawhini - A33883950
Author: Flameisgold - U1652413

Hello all! Apologies for not posting anything of late – but since my move to Bahrain, my muse kind of left me for a while. But I am writing again. This is a short story, though not the complete story – I’m still working on the final part. But I thought I’d post what I’d written so far – to see what sort of response this story gets - if any! And as always, all comments and reviews are very welcome.

Hi Flame, I absolutely agree with what jwf said in the other thread.
You'll not know me, I'm not a regular visitor here, but I remember you from when you started writing, and I've always enjoyed your stories, so it's really good to see you back.

Hello B'Elana,

Thank you for the message. Actually, I do recognize your id, although as you say - I don't think we ever really got to know each other last time I was around the site.

And it feels good to be writing again, even though I struggle like mad with it, at times. That’s because it’s incredibly hard to judge your own writing – so I always appreciate the comments and reviews. So, now, I only hope I can get this story to where I want it to go. Time will tell, as they say!

And thanks for popping over to say hello!

Wow, you must have a good memory then, because I've never been prolific in the AWW. I couldn't write to save my life, but I admire people who can, and I think they should be encouraged.

Hi B'Elana. I popped over to your space earlier. And you certainly can write! You have some fine pieces of work in the guide. I only have a couple of things there (under a different id) so I know how difficult it is to get anything accepted. I think I prefer the more creative side of writing for myself – it stretches my imagination – and can be equally difficult to write – but in a different way. But it’s all good…

hello Flameisgold.

Thank you for your nice words.

My wording was unlucky, I meant creative writing. It is a gift, imo. Writing factual entries like I do isn't really all that difficult, and then there is PR to help with it. But writing fiction, actually *creating* something, that's not for everyone. It needs a talent.

This has a lovely, evocative background- the Norfolk village, complete with weather. The relationships with Jack and with mother are well developed and the heroine's grief is convincing.

My feeling is that this needs to be more than a short story - that romantic novel, perhaps. It goes off on tangents that could be pursued in a longer piece - mother's romances, Jack's parents etc. I think a short story really needs to concentrate on one incident. In a longer story the minor characters could be further developed and sub-plots could be pursued.

Hello Vogonpoet.

It's been a long time. I hope you are well.

I’m glad to hear you say that is sounds convincing. I’d like to think you’ll be saying the same thing when I’ve posted the whole story. But of course you may be saying something entirely different.

Actually, I don’t even know what I’m going to think of it myself! But for the moment, this is the way the story wants to come out. So, I’ll persevere with my idea - and see what happens. Sometimes my ideas work, and sometimes they don’t. But for the moment - this is the only one I've got. And thank you!

Enjoyed that, I think it's beautifully written. Very real. Can't tell where it's going to go - there're no clues!

Good to see you back, Flame.

Hello Waz!

Very nice to hear from you too! And thanks for the welcome.

I'm glad you are enjoying the story - so far. I think I've set myself quite a task here - so I hope it turns out well. But even I'm not sure about that yet.

So I think I'll go for something short and sweet next time, lol.