h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Sonnet - A23606697
Author: CommCorr - U1615166

Hi!
Here is my sonnet! I am quite proud of it, but I don't think it's that good because I'm not a very good poet!
CommCorr

Wonder why that first line seems familiar ?

For a not very good poet you've got a definite feel for rhythm, though it's a touch out in the 12th and 13th line to my ear.

Do you want critique?

If this is your first sonnet, well done!
Do you want some comment, in the manner of a boring English teacher?

In the traditional Shakespearian sonnet, the first to 12th line should have an alternating rhyme pattern (abab etc.) The last pair of lines forms a couplet.
Although there are usually ten syllables in a line, in a pattern of soft and hard stresses known as iambic pentameters, you will find in real sonnets that this does vary a bit. The trick is to read your sonnet out loud, see the bits that jar and change them.
And you don't get fresh hay in winter!
Best wishes