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A21945107 - Marvin Returns To The Dark Side Chapter One
Eposina Started conversation Apr 21, 2007
Entry: Marvin Returns To The Dark Side Chapter One - A21945107
Author: Eposina - U2280458
He's back...
*cue evil laugh*
Well what'd ya think?
A21945107 - Marvin Returns To The Dark Side Chapter One
cupati Posted Apr 21, 2007
I think it's made of awesome!
A21945107 - Marvin Returns To The Dark Side Chapter One
Eposina Posted Apr 22, 2007
Thankyou! 
And they said sequels were never good...
A21945107 - Marvin Returns To The Dark Side Chapter One
minorvogonpoet Posted Apr 24, 2007
A great start, which promises an intriguing story. The dialogue is particularly strong. 
You might want to extend the descriptive prose, to make a better balance between this and the dialogue.
A21945107 - Marvin Returns To The Dark Side Chapter One
Eposina Posted Apr 24, 2007
Yeah, I'm tyring to do that... you should see the original. 
That was all dialogue... looked more like a speech. At least this one looks like a story.
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