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selinalynn Started conversation Nov 7, 2006
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Author: selinalynn - U6526307
This is a piece that had started out a domestic violence poem but then as time went on I changed to to a BDSM theme.Hope you enjoy
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U1250369 Posted Nov 8, 2006
I think it would be better to have a title. Could be a tantalising - especially as you started out with the dom violence theme before SM.
'witht he slap of His hand' - should be 'the' and did you mean to have a capital letter for 'His' ? I presume you did so as to demonstrate the macho male.
Maipulated into ecstacy - Manipulated
A very expressive poem and more suited to SM than domestic violence which is much more unpleasant
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