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A14190626 - Sonnet 4
ianhimself Started conversation Sep 7, 2006
Entry: Sonnet 4 - A14190626
Author: ianhimself - U5477852
The rhymes go 1:5; 2:6; 3:7; 4:8 rather then the normal rhyming couplet approach..... but the duet at the end is traditional .. and the iambic pentameter rhythm is, i think, kept intact
i find that the absent is much more powerful then the present.....
and so this is to absence....
all criticism received gratefully....
ian
A14190626 - Sonnet 4
U1250369 Posted Sep 8, 2006
Yes, it works very well indeed.
'hunger for the not' Did you mean to write that ?
A14190626 - Sonnet 4
ianhimself Posted Sep 8, 2006
yes i did
though maybe "not" ought to have quotation marks....
though i hate quotation marks
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U1250369 Posted Sep 8, 2006
No, leave out the quotation marks. They're ugly and detract from the meaning.
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