h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: A Part Of Me - Chapter 1 - A786828
Author: sthwba - U192030

I would like to contribute the story I'm working on to the Fiction site.

on a purely technical note bung a at the beggining and a at the end to get the guide ml to work.

havent got time to actually read it

FABT

As it's fiction, Peer Review is the wrong place for it. If you remove it, and the re-submit it to the Alternative Writing Workshop you should get a good response there. Good luck.

I read it. It was lovely.

Would it help if you used sub-headings "Rose", "" and "Adam" to indicate which was talking?
(Just that it wasn't immediately obvious the first time her dad took over from her)

thank you tefkat, you are the first person to comment on it, other than my very close friends whom i'm writing it for.
first part is about 5/6 chapters stuck together. hopefully by the type of dialogue i've tried to make it apparent whether it's rose, adam or jerry talking early on.
still unsure what happens now, whether i have to do anything. ie, don't know why mine has 'remove' beside it on the alt wrt wksp.
any comments, good or bad, are welcome.
STH

Very moving and thoughtful piece. Was a bit confused as to who was speaking when initially, but love the idea and the feelings.
Take care
Boots

hiya
have lots more of the story to tell
still lost as hell tho
will try and update, let me know what you think
haven't even got round to the actual gist of the story yet
can we say 'super-hero ghost story'?
all to come
will try and put chapter 2 (load of chapters stuck together) onto the alt writing workshop
if you don't see it next week, i'm still lost and will be asking for help!
luv
sthwba