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Entry: Sepultura - A771121
Author: Miranda (feeling cool because of a temporary tattoo) - U178876

I missed an entry on this exellent band, so I decided to write one myself!Well, I certainly think I have kept to the facts, but perhaps it is a little too short? Should I add something about their texts? Any advice will be accepted with thanks!
M

Great to see an entry on Brazil's finest comedy band. I have to say that you missed out the fact that Max is a stroppy sod.

Perhaps something more about their style, plus some comments on the content of their 'songs', and I use the term loosely..

Thanks!
I feel a bit on shaky ground when writing about their style, I'm not sure I have the vocabulary - I'm a cellist myself...

How about 'hammering', 'loud', 'tuneless' and 'slightly rubbish'?

You could mention that Max went on to form Soulfly.

Fuzzbap, I don't think that your comments are particularly helpful

I agree that it's too short, but it's a good start. Don't let your lack of familiarity with the type of music put you off writing an entry. I have no talent for either art or music, yet I've written entries on Bernard Herrmann and Jack Vettriano.

The best way to write entries that I've found is to start with a structure, and plan what you want to write. As there are probably quite a lot of people who have never heard of them before, you can start from bare facts, tell how they got together, any anecdotes about them. If they have any interesting lyrics, you can perhaps include a quote as an introduction.

A good idea would be to have a look at an edited entry on another band. A593741 is a good example (and one of my favourite bands ) and might give you a few ideas.

As I said, good start

The bassist's name is misspelled, it's Paulo Jr. and not Paolo.

Apart from that, I think that the entry is pretty good. Maybe you could add a link to a Sepultura page...

Their official site (in english):

http://www.sepultura.com.br/_en/news.php

There's nothing much to say about Sepultura anyways, maybe just the factoid that Sepultura means Grave/Tomb in Portuguese.

Cheers,

HELL

Thanks, everyone!
Seems like I have to do some more research for this entry,and since I don't have much time right now, I think i'll take it out of Peer Rewiew for now. See you!
M

'tuneless' and 'slightly rubbish'? The rubbish part is a matter of taste, bap, if you cant hear the tunes, you should listen more closely. theyres plenty of it, in the soloes, especially.

Also, its death metal, not comedy.

That's right, psychoholic, you tell him!