h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Yoyoing........ - A713828
Author: Hornbeck - U185679

a small bit of information on the yoyo.
Hornbeck

Oh. Somehow this one got overlooked

Definitely a good start but you'll have to fill in some gaps there...

I wouldn't believe that yoyos were older than every other toys (except dolls). All sorts of toys have been found in excavation sites from the stone ages.

Entries in the Edited Guide are written in third person, apart from very few exceptions if they are dealing with utterly personal experience like depression or cancer.

The main point is this: rather than linking to websites, you should give the details here! What is it that separates a good yoyo from a bad one? How do you make it spin around over your head? Is it worth while to construct one DIY-wise? What's the trick that most amazes your audience? These kinds of things, for a suggestion. You're the expert, and we'd like to learn from you!


There's a couple of tips for survival in Peer Review at A645059


And keep up the good work!

Well, hornbeck seems a little overwhelmed by reality, judging from the home space. Could have been a good entry, but it's just too short of content atm, imo. Shame.

-Lucinda

Interestingly, as well as having written the entry in the first person and plugging hir own services, which surely constitutes advertising, this entry fails to tell us what a yoyo is. It assumes we know!

Are you intending to amend this entry, Hornbeck? It has the makings of a good one, but needs more work.

Apparently this one will only get finished from someone who picks it up from the Flea Market...