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Baron Grim Posted Mar 17, 2010
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Just moving the link as the page runs over.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted Mar 17, 2010
Thanks for those comments, TC. Can you suggest a word instead of "hated"?
I'll look into restructuring those Bosphorous-crossing paragraphs.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted Mar 17, 2010
OK, I've juggled around the last few paragraphs of the first entry now.
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You can call me TC Posted Mar 17, 2010
Hmm. Instead of "hated"?
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Well, I've re-listened to the bit of "In Our Time" where they explain the basic reasons for the split
http://www.bbc.co.uk/programmes/b00l5mhl
but it's difficult to sum it up in a nutshell.
Perhaps something along the lines of
"As the Sunnis and Shi'ite harboured centuries-old deep-felt theological differences, these two political units were at war with each other ..
or "harboured a centuries-old enmity"...
It doesn't really mean anything different from your "hated", though, I suppose.
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You can call me TC Posted Mar 17, 2010
The final paragraphs come together better now - in the fourth last one, however, both of the first sentences start with "Alexios" -slightly too repetitive.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted Mar 17, 2010
I've changed it to:
These two political units were at war with each other, as the Sunnis and Shi'ites had deep-seated theological differences, while both were on reasonably friendly terms with the Christian world.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted Mar 19, 2010
I've added a Further Reading section at the end of the last entry A63492393.
I've thought about my use of the phrase "a time of lawlessness", and I think I will leave it as it is. It is certainly a simplification, but then all history it. I don't want to get into a complete history of the 'Dark Ages'.
People seem to be fairly happy with these entries as they are, so perhaps I should submit them to the University as a Project now. This means they will be passed on to the wonderful Galaxy Babe for sub-editing, then through Peer Review for nitpicks.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted Mar 22, 2010
After discussion with Recumbentman, I've decided to change this back to the original 'hated'. It was my first thoughts, it is immediately understandable, and it fits.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted May 24, 2010
The First Crusade Project is now published. It's on the Front Page!
There's a minor glitch - the link on the front page points to the last entry rather than the first one, but I've asked the Eds to fix it and it will be sorted out soon.
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Gnomon - time to move on Posted May 24, 2010
Thank you. And thanks to Galaxy Babe for doing the sub-editing.
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