h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Karlstadt am Main, Germany - A6357080
Author: jam ye - [nouns, phonetics and anagrams - OH MY!] - U168592

This is a Flea Market Rescue.

Original Entry is here: A3865070

Original PR thread is here: F2065800?thread=646827

Flea Market thread is here: F74125?thread=1273431

All suggestions and tips from PR taken into account and some more background research done. Have tried to keep the original authors voice in the Entry. Suggestions and so forth more than welcome.

MJ

Oh, and I added some links, but I'm not sure about linking to a german language site? Is it wise to do that? Advice concerning that would be great

MJ

This is a lovely entry! Thanks for rescuing it.

I don't know about linking to a German language site. I can't see a problem with it myself.

There are a few spelling mistakes and grammar points. It may look like a lot but should only take you five minutes to fix up:

more then eight hundred years old --> more than eight hundred years old
which is close to the river Main and --> which is close to the river Main, and
It might not look appear very nice --> It might not look very nice

The work of medieval artist Tilman Riemenschneider, can be found -->
The work of medieval artist Tilman Riemenschneider can be found

three of his wooden sculptures on display --> three of his wooden sculptures are on display

If you have a closer look towards the roof --> If you take a close look at the roof

Like this, the inhabitants know --> From this, the inhabitants know

It is as popular with the people of Karlstadt --> It is popular with the people of Karlstadt

The walk towards this site --> The walk to this site

Apart from site-seeing --> Apart from sight-seeing

The choice of food and drink is good, the town -->
The choice of food and drink is good; the town

centered --> centred

do as the romans do --> do as the Romans do

The small theatre in the Gerbergasse, has performances -->
The small theatre in the Gerbergasse has performances

Accomodation --> Accommodation
and enjoys popularity with --> and is popular with
(b. 1604 - d. 1670) --> (1604 - 1670)
(b.?1480 - d. 1541) --> (1480? - 1541)
german language site --> German language site
800-years-anniversary --> 800-year-anniversary
also offers accomodation --> also offers accommodation

Once those are out of the way, this shouldn't have many problems going through Peer Review.

Thanks a lot G. You're a gem I'll fix up those asap.

As for the german language site, you can get it translated if you pump it through Google...perhaps I can suggest that too??

Thanks again.

MJ

Don't make a big deal about the site being in German. Many of the people going to a German city will at least understand that people in Germany speak German.

You were right, it did take about five minutes.

All done.

Oops! Another one:

Cultural hightlights --> Cultural highlights

Now I'm off to bed.

Ah! Cheers! Think I'm dozing too. Thanks again.

Good one

I really like this and have only one comment, about the number of times that "nice" crops up. Any chance of some other word? I am particularly picky about it, having been to a school where we weren't allowed to use "nice" in any of our essays

Come to think of it, we weren't allowed to use "got" or "a lot" either. But you're okay on those two

Fb

You're right, they're were a few repetitive - uh, are they adjectives? (never could get the hang of english grammar) in the original, I'll have a squizz and see what I can weed out. Cheers FB

Okay, have taken out the overabundant 'nice' and used my thesaurus to its greatest potential

Hope it reads nicer now

MJ

Just thought I'd bump this up again as I've fine-tooth combed it and fiddled about in GuideML and added some links that actually work now

MJ

Have rewritten some of the text to try and keep it timeless.

MJ

Hi MJ,

Great Fleamarket rescue !

I wondered whether

'the legend says that a Swedish soldier was forgotten in Karlstadt...'

might be clearer to readers if it said:

the legend says that a Swedish soldier was left behind in Karlstadt...

or

the legend says that a Swedish soldier was forgotten and left behind in Karlstadt...

It took me a couple of times to understand what you meant - that's not to say others wouldn't get it straight off! Up to you.

Also, this sentence:

'There are sometimes even tours through the hills offered by locals during this time of year.'

sounds a bit clunky somehow. Maybe it could be inverted slightly to:

'Sometimes there are even tours through the hills offered by locals during this time of year.'


Small little nitpicks though. Good stuff

Jules

Thanks Jules, you're right, I'll fix them ups

Think this one is pretty much done too

all

A week and I've looked again and freshened this up a little more. If there's no more suggestions I'll let this mature.