h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Please can ya check out my entry at
http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A525151
You seem like a really experienced writer so I hope you can find the time to give me your thoughts
thanx
Tim

I can't comment on the factual content of the article, since I know practically nothing about Wales, but it has a lot of information, which is always a good thing. There are a few typos and other things wrong.

The paragraph after the quote on Rugby reads:

"Says the leader of Plaid Cymru in 1995 and all welsh people I'm sure will agree(for those who don't know rugby very well check out Rugby Union"

I'd begin that 'So says' because it's a complete paragraph. Also, but a space before the bracket and remember to close the bracket at the end of the sentence. However, I wouldn't put that sentence in brackets. I'd write it as:

"So says the leader of Plaid Cymru in 1995 and I'm sure all welsh people will agree. For those who don't know rugby very well check out Rugby Union."

(You seem to have lost quite a few full stops in that paragraph - make sure that you don't forget them just because the sentence ends in a LINK.)

From the paragraph on Language:

"This is because during the reign of Henry VIII he Anglicized all really welsh names, so the Welsh sirname 'Sion' was converted into the more English 'Jones' and 'Coch' bacame 'Gogh' etc."

I don't think 'anglicized' should have a capital letter, but Welsh should. 'sirname' should be 'surname' and 'bacame' should be 'became'.

In fact, the whole sentence might read better as:

"This is because Henry VIII, during his reign, anglicized all really Welsh names, so the Welsh surname 'Sion' was converted into the more English 'Jones' and 'Coch' became 'Gogh' etc."

You might want to reword your links to other articles. 'For more info on...' doesn't really fit in with the style of the Edited Guide.

I don't want to correct too many things like this - that's really the job of a Sub-Editor - but I thought I'd point out the couple of things that jumped out at me. I hope you find it helpful.