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The Art of Film and its Slow Decline

Post 1

frontiersman

Just a few changes needed:

'money grubbing', '...credited as the', ...actors and actresses...audience...owes..keen eye...graze? (or grace?)
after a while...fault lies...received...today's cinema...what happened...
continuously...disappointed...

Sorry for the long list, I thought it easier for you to find the errors and correct them.

Apart from the paragraphing mentioned by your previous correspondent, the piece is well written and interesting to read.

Ronsmiley - smileysmiley - cheers


The Art of Film and its Slow Decline

Post 2

sooka5

ok man, i fixed a few things. thanks for the suggestions. i wrote that at about 2:30 am in my time and didnt proof it at all. Made corrections now and would be appreciative if you could let me know what u think now.
Sincerely,
Martin


The Art of Film and its Slow Decline

Post 3

frontiersman

That measures up nicely now.

I think, perhaps, your use of the terms 'key eye' and 'grazing' is an English versus American language culture difference. Our's would be 'keen eye' and 'gracing' Correct me if you think I'm wrong in this assumption.

Ron smiley - cheers


The Art of Film and its Slow Decline

Post 4

sooka5

i missed the key eye part-that should be keen, but the grazing shall remain. its as passing us by and not gracing us. thank you


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