h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: 3 Most Dangerous BMX Tricks - A80646762
Author: Mags - U14762593

Hi Guys, 

I just wrote this article about BMX. I would like to contribute to the extreem sport section, therefore I would be happy to contribute more article.

Thank you and kind regards, 
Mags

Hey Mags,

Good Entry! I spotted a few punctuation and grammar issues that I don't have time to go through right now... but apart from that a good, informative read.

Try not to get too !

Hi Mags,

A couple of points for us non-BMX fans:

What does 'catch air' mean?

What does BMX stand for?

I was wondering - what makes these tricks more dangerous than others? What criteria are you judging them by - the most injuries caused, the most likely to go wrong, or the risk of injury if you get it wrong, or something else I haven't thought of?

When you say 'a special type of person' could you elaborate on this at all?

A good Entry on something I would have never considered myself.

Hi Mags, a big welcome to h2g2 and Peer Review



I really like your piece, it explains very clearly how these three manoeuvres are attempted. That is not so easy to do - so well done!


There are a few minor edits that I'd like to suggest


tricks have gotten bigger and better


----> tricks have become bigger and better


(we use British English in the Guide and 'gotten' is US English)

Your link to "BMX riding" doesn't seem to be working


asphault -----> asphalt

recognize ----> recognise (British English again )

incessant need to catch air

I love this phrase! I guess it means to leap into the air? Maybe a footnote here? Then I can impress my grandsons with some new terminology, as I am often forced to watch BMX footage on TV when in their company.


many. many injuries. ----> many, many injuries.

(typo: replace full stop with a comma)


the 360 is done by a rider when [he comes off the ramp and throws] their weight to one side or another, spinning their bike a full 360 degrees

---->
the 360 is performed by a rider when coming off the ramp, throwing their weight to one side or another and spinning their bike a full 360 degrees


. . . and thanks once more for submitting this to Peer Review!


Lanzababy Scout

Vip:

Catching air is indeed jumping the bike.

BMX stands for Bicycle Motocross, as stated at the end of the first paragraph.

Mags, you mention a no footer, but not a backflip? Surely that's only more dangerous, in the total number of injuries. Although, I wouldn't want an ice cream any more than a face plant.

Oh, I see... motor cross... moto X... MX... now I geddit.

Any chance of making it a little more obvious for those not in the know?

Is there any trick which looks really dangerous but is actually mostly harmless (somehow the opposite of the No Footer)? If so, would you consider including it?

Thank you for that!

I am still learning how to move within this website! I didn't know that I can not reply to individuals directly.
Just to make sure: I will take all those suggestions into account and will make relevant changes!
Thank you so much to all of you!

Hi Mags,

Are these *the* three most dangerous tricks or just three *of* the most dangerous tricks?

From your description, I can't see the difference between The 360 and The Tail Whip, can you explain them further? Or am I being dense?

'nother Mags

In a 360, rider AND BIKE do a 360 degree horizontal spin. In a tailwhip, rider and handlebars carry on in a straight line facing forwards, and just the back wheel, pedals, chain and frame do a 360 beneath them.

Are these three tricks really more dangerous than a backflip, a flair?

This would be the perfect entry to link to a video. For instance, for a DOUBLE tailwhip, check out the very first move in this:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XvOB68YECW4

Ah, Twiglet, 'twas me being dense then

Sorry to nitpick but the number 3 should probably be 'Three' in the title, and a 'The' in front might also be good.

But "Three Most Dangerous BMX Tricks" is also correct, isn't it?

I said 'might'

Indeed you did. I was just checking

I would add a (brief) paragraph about the safety clothing/equipment that BMX riders wear.

*waits for Mags to post to let us know she's ready for more comments*

On reflection, I would say that if you changed the title to "The 3 Most Dangerous BMX Tricks", then it would be factually incorrect. Adding "The" changes the meaning *completely*.

Thing is, you have to pronounce this title right to understand it. Specifically, you have to pronounce the word "most" as does Keanu Reeves in "Bill and Ted's Excellent Adventure".

I agree that "three most dangerous tricks" is a better* title than "the tree most dangerous...".

* more factual, and using a pleasant phrasing.