h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Hi...

I hope you'll accept this in the spirit in which it's offered. I have taken your words (well, I fixed a couple of spelling things) and presented them in a slightly different 'shape.'

Mind you, this reflects _my_ interpretation, and may not present the thoughts quite the way _you_ want them presented. It's just my way of saying: play with it a little, experiment, give it character and tecture and shape. (And mind your spelling! )

You can take the reader on a ride; it just takes a little work!



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And so, here then, for what it's worth...

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You can see past this world.
You can't help but break down.
We all want so much but it all just boils down
To these last few hours of our lives.

We all just sit here and waste away.
I want more than just okay, I want more than everything.
And we're not seeing the path we should see anymore.

In these last few hours we could all know.
In these last few hours we could all see,
but nothing is ever as it seems.
It is all here and there but not where we choose.

It's all the things we can not see.
It is the past and present of our lives.

It is the hours of our last few days.

And, of course, right after I say 'mind your spelling', I spell 'texture' wrong.

Well, I guess that proves that it really _does_ take work!


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Yes, well at least I think spelling takes work but I have been trying to not spell as bad but sometimes you just cant help it. I liked you view of my poem it was really good! thank you for your advice people here seem so nice to me I am sorta new I moved from get writing to h2g2 so things are working out great. Thank you once again