h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: Hip Hop Rivalry - A75157653
Author: jzzyprin93 - U14600827

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This is interesting, and I'll bet lots of hootooers don't know any of this.

I would change the first sentence's assertion, maybe, to talk about the popularity of hip-hop, rather than challenging the reader to accept that it is 'one of the best' genres. (And I'm not just saying that because I don't listen to hip-hop. I'm a horrible old folkie, but that has nothing to do with it.)

Maybe you could tell us more about what kinds of things hip-hop artists feud about. Only personal rivalries, or ideas, business affairs, whatever?

Also, a question of personal interest: What does Ice-T say about all of this? I really respect him as an actor, and he seems to have a ton to say about things. Is there a really big divide between rap and hip-hop?

No there isn't a big divide between real rap or hip hop,but between fake hip hop and rap, yes there is a big divide.

Heh-heh, and what makes hip-hop fake? Bad rhymes? Bad ideas?

What makes hip hop fake is the people who are spitting the rhymes. They have to be saying something, anything.

Ah. You need to talk to Willem. He and I are in an ongoing dicussion about songs and song lyrics. I agree - say something besides 'baby, baby'.

In the meantime, I'm going to suggest that what this essay needs is more about hip-hop: What it does, who these people are, where they live, what it feels like...you almost have a rhythm going in this, as it is, make it more like that.

I'm going to edit it to add more hip-hop rivalries and the basis behind most beefs.

And explain 'beef' if it's a special term. (Remember: This is being read by Brits, Germans, and other non-US-type people. )

Disagreements=beefs

I know...but put it in the story. Just in case.

Ok I'm going to edit it by 2morrow. I'm trying to finish with The Road to New Zealand and I'm having writers block and I need help.

This is interesting.

However, I agree with Dmitri that it would be better if you told your readers more about hip-hop and the artists involved in it.

I would suggest you split this piece into shorter paragraphs.

I think this entry had promise and could be FM material.

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I agree - I learned something from this as I know of Tupac but didn't know the circumstances of his death...