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Post 1

anhaga

A small note of a word needing removal:

In the second paragraph of "Loss and Remembrance", the "were" in this sentence is unnecessary:

"On the afternoon of 10 March, the thousands marched in full dress uniform, most in the famous red tunics, *were* led by riders on black chargers through the crowd-lined streets of Edmonton to assemble before Canada's Governor General, Prime Minister, Alberta's Lieutenant Governor and Premier and the families of the fallen officers for a celebration of their lives and of the community they had sworn to serve and protect."


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Post 2

anhaga

Also, the locality of the killings is "Rochfort Bridge" not "Rockford Bridge".


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Post 3

Icy North

Nice to see you around, Anhaga.


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Post 4

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

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Hi Anhaga, I concur with Icy, good to see you. Thanks for those corrections, now fixedsmiley - towel

So sorry to hear the news of more Canadian police killings smiley - sadface

All the best,

GB
smiley - galaxysmiley - diva


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Post 5

anhaga

Thanks for the condolences, Galaxy Babe. The killings in Moncton have been pretty disturbing to all of us here.


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