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re the differences between the nautilus shell formation and that of the common garden snail.(helix aspersa)


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However, there are many types of snails and they all develop unique shapes according to their species. I think it is fair to leave the contrast that unlike snails, the nautilus develops a chambered shell and not get sidetracked. - but it is up to you of course.

A942572 The Nautilus - a Creature of the Deep - for ease of finding the Entry

Entry: Nautiluses - A942572
Author: Gnomon - U151503

OK, how about changing this:

The basic shape of a nautilus is like the shell of a garden snail, but with the opening facing upwards.

to this:

The basic shape of a nautilus is a spiral, like a flattened version of the shell of a garden snail.

in my opinion perfect! ( although to be pedantic you should say

*common* garden snail, because there are other sorts such as the banded garden snail.)


(can you tell I trained as a biology teacher?)

Done.

(can you tell I never studied biology?)

not really - but if you had been a biologist you may well have written this from a scientific viewpoint. Because you have written it from your own perspective it is much more accessible, which is why I said I liked how you had pitched it.

Insecteen's picture has now been added to the Entry.

Beautiful!

Is this one ready now do you reckon?

I've tried to avoid saying this but, I don't like much the dramatic bit at the end of the title either. Nautiluses was fine, really -- it has an eerie ring which sort of makes you feel that you are in deep sea (or maybe it's just me).

Agree with Toybox about the end of the title

I still think that 'Nautiluses' whilst grammatically correct, just doesn't scan well, for a title. As the entry is mostly about Nautilus pompilius, perhaps 'The Chambered Nautilus' would be more appropriate?

And...
...a dramatic title would draw non-scientists into reading the article, if the title makes it look dull from the outset it will be less appealing. The pitch of this article is aimed at the general public, and I am for a more wide ranging 'Stop me and read me' title.

Absolutely gorgeous picture.

Lanzababy, you're forgetting things. Check posting 13 in which I announced that I changed the title as per your recommendation, and posting 14, where you thanked me for doing so.

Oh, you're not. You were justifying your suggestion, rather than asking me again to do it.

IMHO Lanzababy's second suggestion (in post 3) is absolutely the best

Sorry, Eagle, can you be more specific?

We're very happy to take this Entry when you're ready. Lovely illustration as well by Insecteen.

I'm happy with the entry as it stands.

Toybox is not fully happy with the title, which was suggested by Lanzababy.

Not-so-bald Eagle has made some comments about agreeing with Toybox and also agreeing with a suggestion of Lanzababy's but has not been forthcoming when asked to explain what he meant, so I think we'll have to ignore him.

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