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Peer Review: A673896 - the way of the world

Post 1

Ackalon

Big title- could be a bit about hamburg, germany where I was at the time,
I originally called it a circular story, intending to have a story without a theme, that got back to the begining in the end, so its a sort of semicircular story as it was never finished...
Hope you like it, and look forward to hearing your views...


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Post 2

Ackalon

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A663590


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Post 3

Ackalon

http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A663896


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Post 4

Ackalon

think i have it smiley - smiley
http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A673896


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Post 5

Nireena

Um. Couple of points:

- Doing the article in plain text is fine, but you might want to leave a line break in between paragraphs. Or, doing it in Guide ML and just putting and around the paragraphs will do much towards making it easier to read.

- While there's some interesting speculation/philosophy in there, what exactly is the purpose of the article? Edited Guide articles tend to be a bit more focused and not based solely on personal opinion or musings.

While it's fine as a Guide entry, I'm not quite sure it's suitable for the Edited Guide.

smiley - star


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Post 6

Dr Hell

I took a first look and couldn't convince myself to read through it. Anyways, this entry is not what I'm used to see in the EDITED guide. I honestly don't think GuideML alone will remedy it.

Give it a format, add some paragraphs (not necessarily GuideML, just hit the retur-key from time to time) and maybe it'll look more inviting to a reader like me.

Until then I guess it's no go for the edited guide.

Bye,

HELL


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Post 7

Gnomon - time to move on

This is an interesting piece of writing, but it is not Edited Guide material. Edited Guide entries are supposed to be factual descriptions of the real world and the bizarre things that happen or have happened. This is more of a personal opinion about the state of the world.

Your entry is worth keeping in the guide and is already available to all through the Search button. As a piece of writing, it needs more work - perhaps you would put it into the Writer's Workshop, where somebody might help you get the style and formatting right.


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Post 8

Monsignore Pizzafunghi Bosselese

Hey, how about one of these places? The edited guide is looking for fact rather than fiction, but (of course) there's space for everything smiley - smiley

AGGH http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A506675
AWW http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A608799
FFFF http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A254314
And our own newspaper, http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/ThePost


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Post 9

Ackalon

If any of you are still on the thread, the reason that the formats funny is that it is copied and pasted from my own web site. I appreciate that it is maybe personal opinion, and maybe even an ego trip to lead you through it, but hey, I offer it for nothing, and expect nothing in return- theres always more where that came from...
Thanks
Adam


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Post 10

Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation

You might like to submit to the Writing Workshop instead - that way, if it becomes EG material, you can bring it back when it's really ready. Interesting, though! smiley - smiley

Whoami? smiley - cake
Scout, Sub-Editor


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Post 11

Mikey the Humming Mouse - A3938628 Learn More About the Edited Guide!

I agree with Whoami? on this one.

smiley - smiley
Mikey


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Post 12

Zarquon's Singing Fish!

Thirded!

smiley - fishsmiley - musicalnote


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Post 13

Monsignore Pizzafunghi Bosselese

Let's start over again... Any Scout seconding a move to the AWW?


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Post 14

Monsignore Pizzafunghi Bosselese

smiley - footprints


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Post 15

alji's

No sign of Ackalon for two months

Alji smiley - zensmiley - wizard


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Post 16

Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation

Bossel - do whatever you think best, I'll second it.

Whoami? smiley - cake


I still exist

Post 17

Ackalon

Just dont seem to have as much time as I had..
Or maybe it was the escape commitee..


Try That !

Post 18

Ackalon

I sort of hacked it down to size, kept it on one subject and put it in the third person- Better ?
I hope that it doesnt sound bitter- I liked the place and the people..




Try That !

Post 19

Whoami - iD dislikes punctuation

It is a bit negative - you say nothing of what there is to do, and it reads like a voiceover guy at the beginning of a dreary, dark film. Still, good work. I'm not sure, but see what the others think.

However, I certainly found it a good read. smiley - smiley

Whoami? smiley - cake


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