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Peer Review: A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Started conversation Jun 5, 2006
Entry: Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter - A12180313
Author: Galaxy Babe - Scout/ACE - U128652
Resubmission now I have addressed the points in the previous PR thread: F4440326?thread=3113252
Submitted 5 June
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Cal - interim high priest of the Church of the Holy Tail Posted Jun 5, 2006
glad to see this back in, and as good as ever
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 5, 2006
Thank you, I hope it's improved
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Cal - interim high priest of the Church of the Holy Tail Posted Jun 5, 2006
I thought it was good anyway, but yes it is better
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Skankyrich [?] Posted Jun 5, 2006
Shame you can't work the same 
with the woman herself, really 
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
U168592 Posted Jun 5, 2006
Nice one, does the "lady" justice.
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 5, 2006
I'm beginning to wonder where her fans are...
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
U168592 Posted Jun 5, 2006
Oh my...
Oh, ah.
Nice link to Butterflies 
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 5, 2006
D'ya think I'd have missed that opportunity?
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
U168592 Posted Jun 5, 2006
Does she have one tattooed on her ample bum?
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
There is only one thing worse than being Gosho, and that is not being Gosho Posted Jun 5, 2006
"Mariah Carey was born... Mariah's parents divorced when she was just... Mariah's mother Patricia Hickey... Mariah was singing on stage... Mariah attended Oldfield Middle School... Mariah's early jobs... Mariah's astonishing five octave... Mariah's 1990 debut single... Mariah was just 20 years old"
And that's just from one section (Early Discovery). There are 52 instances of 'Mariah/Mariah's' in the entry, not counting her name following the quote at the end of the entry. The name is superfluous because you announce the quote with "Finally, a few words from the golden girl herself". A quote only needs one attribution.
That tells me two things - some of the sentences could be merged, and some instances of 'Mariah' could be changed to 'she' or 'her' or some other description. If you use someone's name so many times and - in some cases - so close together when a personal pronoun would do, it can easily come across as sycophantic.
plummetting - plummeting
"Mariah support the fight against AIDS"
'Mariah supports the fight against AIDS'
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 5, 2006
Was there anything you liked about the entry BH?
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
There is only one thing worse than being Gosho, and that is not being Gosho Posted Jun 5, 2006
Probably, but I'm not at all keen on the subject matter so I'm not reading it too deeply.
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 6, 2006
Updated
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 7, 2006
I hope Jimster notices that I haven't talked about Mariah's sex-life.
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Skankyrich [?] Posted Jun 7, 2006
I'd rather not know, to be honest
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 8, 2006
Yes, that's why I left it out
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 15, 2006
I've noticed that Mariah keeps popping up when I load my Yahoo email. Asking me to listen to her latest single.
Any other comments on the entry?
A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor Posted Jun 19, 2006
I wonder who buys her records if she has no fans...
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Peer Review: A12180313 - Mariah Carey - singer/songwriter
- 1: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Jun 5, 2006)
- 2: Cal - interim high priest of the Church of the Holy Tail (Jun 5, 2006)
- 3: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Jun 5, 2006)
- 4: Cal - interim high priest of the Church of the Holy Tail (Jun 5, 2006)
- 5: Skankyrich [?] (Jun 5, 2006)
- 6: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Jun 5, 2006)
- 7: U168592 (Jun 5, 2006)
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- 9: U168592 (Jun 5, 2006)
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- 11: U168592 (Jun 5, 2006)
- 12: There is only one thing worse than being Gosho, and that is not being Gosho (Jun 5, 2006)
- 13: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Jun 5, 2006)
- 14: There is only one thing worse than being Gosho, and that is not being Gosho (Jun 5, 2006)
- 15: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Jun 6, 2006)
- 16: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Jun 7, 2006)
- 17: Skankyrich [?] (Jun 7, 2006)
- 18: Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor (Jun 8, 2006)
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