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Bluebottle

A87948490 'Make Mine Music' - the Disney Animated Classic
I'll subscribe the above, please sub-edit. Or something like that anyway...

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Make Mine Music

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SashaQ - happysad

Thank you! I've cribesubsed smiley - ok


Make Mine Music

Post 3

Bluebottle

One question for you – you've said, "Disney first combined music and animation in the 'Silly Symphonies' cartoons" – I'm not sure that's quite true, there's whistling etc in 'Steamboat Willie' (1928). Would you like to slightly rephrase as I know what you mean - they're the first substantial combination that truly married both forms to create an inseparable whole, but a toe had already been dipped in the water.

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Make Mine Music

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SashaQ - happysad

Good point, yes I see.

Let's redo that paragraph:

Walt Disney Productions (now known as Walt Disney Animation Studios) is a pioneering animation studio. It first combined synchronised sound with animation in the Mickey Mouse cartoon 'Steamboat Willie' in 1928, and first created animations to accompany music in the 'Silly Symphonies' cartoons (1929-1939). In 1940 Fantasia was released in cinemas - it features animations inspired by pieces of classical music, plus scenes combining animation and live action. Although it failed to make a profit when it first appeared in cinemas, Fantasia has become known as the third Disney Classic.

and the Ub Iwerks link can go on 'Steamboat Willie'

How's that?


Make Mine Music

Post 5

Bluebottle

Okay, I've tweaked that if you'd like to have a thorough read-through? The only other change I've made is to put short film titles in italics – early Disney short films still count as films rather than episodes.

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Make Mine Music

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SashaQ - happysad

Aha, thank you smiley - ok

I read through and see the problem sentence is still there smiley - huh Do you need me to have another go at rephrasing? I think the first bit "It first combined synchronised sound with animation" doesn't need 'combined' after all.


Make Mine Music

Post 7

Bluebottle

Changed nowsmiley - ok

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Make Mine Music

Post 8

Bluebottle

So let me know if you're happy with it and whether you're sending in a picture.

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Melody Time

Post 9

Bluebottle

A87949499 - Melody Time
I'll be subbing the above, so please subscribe.

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Make Mine Melody Music Time

Post 10

SashaQ - happysad

The problem sentence is still there... smiley - laugh What about: "created animations to accompany music (rather than music merely accompanying the animations)" ?

Yes, I will be sending pictures for these two Entries soon smiley - biggrin

I have cribesubsed to Melody Time smiley - ok


Make Mine Melody Music Time

Post 11

Bluebottle

I changed that sentence again, so hopefully it'll meet your approval now, in time for us to go through exactly the same thing in the next entry smiley - winkeye

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Make Mine Music

Post 12

SashaQ - happysad

Thank you - Yes, Make Mine Music is now ready to go, and the paragraph can be copied into Melody Time indeed smiley - ok


Melody Time

Post 13

Bluebottle

A87949499 - Melody Time
Would you like to have a read-through of Melody Time?

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Melody Time

Post 14

SashaQ - happysad

Thanks <BB< smiley - ok

Just a couple of things I'd like to change, please:

"No further compilation films of this type were made for fifty years until Fantasia 2000. " --> "No further compilation films of this type were made for 50 years - Fantasia 2000 was released in the year 2000. "

"thus he taught the coyotes and they have continued ever since. " --> "thus he taught the coyotes to howl at the moon and they have continued ever since. "

smiley - ok


Melody Time

Post 15

Bluebottle

Tweaked slightly; technically 'Fantasia 2000' had a limited released in December 1999 and then a general release in 2000, so it depends if by 'release' you mean premiere or widespread, which is why I didn't include the year.

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Melody Time

Post 16

SashaQ - happysad

Perfect - thank you! smiley - ok


Make Mine Music

Post 17

h2g2 Guide Editors

Congratulations! Make Mine Music is on the Front Page today smiley - magicsmiley - musicalnote


Make Mine Music

Post 18

h2g2 Guide Editors

Congratulations! Melody Time is on the Front Page today smiley - magicsmiley - musicalnote


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