h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

A15883374

Hi, steve-paul, I've Sub-edited your Entry, so have a look and make sure everything is alright.

Hi, thanks

there is just a few things [that are my fault] that are real nitpicks:

(first paragraph) ---> "was THE first man to circumnavigate",

(first paragraph) ---> I don't think the 'and' needs to be there before "going on to do it a third time."

(first paragraph..again): ---> maybe a semicolan after "lived in" instead of ",and".

(third paragraph) ---> maybe no comma after "parents had died"

(third paragraph) ---> i think deckhand is one word

(eleventh paragraph ('Travels to Australia')) --->
---> i think that should be one sentence


thanks again

Sorry for what I missed or messed up. I think I would leave that 'and' in there, though. It makes more sense to me to leave it.

no, you didn't mess up anything, thanks, it's looking good.

I'm going to be away for a few days so if i don't reply to anything after tonight don't think i'm being rude.

Is it good to go, then?

Certinelly