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Trin Tragula

Hello there! I've just finished polishing 'The Arrangement' and the UG version can be found here:


I've just ironed out a couple of typos and that was it. As for other changes, I had just a few very minor queries. As you know, this is the UnderGuide and you are in charge, so the following just need a 'Yes', a 'No' or a 'How dare you suggest such a thing? Leave it alone, idiot!' smiley - biggrin

Please feel free to copy and paste into a reply if that helps - and then just yea or nay. Here we go then:

>>And then without further word Hajir turned on her heels<< - 'a further word'? 'further words'?

>>So pulling a large saucepan from a shelf<< - comma after 'so'?

>>So pushing these thoughts to the back of her mind << - Don't think you need that 'so' at all.

>>Why I swear it gets worse every day<< - comma after 'why'?

>>she thanked him for the wisdom in his choice<< - of his choice? Might just be me, that one.

>>Did you really ever imagine it would be so different?<< - another 'so' which threw me a little: very much up to you, that one.

>>Moving slowly, so not to wake him<< - 'so as not to wake him'?

>>She is dreaming again<< - given that this paragraph is in italics and the use of those earlier was also for a dream, I wasn't sure you really needed this first sentence.

>>it was a daily struggle just to feed them<< - 'them' a very tiny hiccup here: 'the two of them' perhaps?

>>it took every ounce of self control<< - hyphen in 'self control'?

The only other thing I wanted to raise were the headers and breaks (lines of asterisks). I've left these as they are, but I thought they needed to be centered - and possibly the two 'Dhaka' breaks to be subheaders also. Again, entirely up to you.

A fine piece of writing - I enjoyed this very much smiley - ok

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Post 2


Hello Trin,

Thanks for your help and suggestions. Please feel free to do whatever you feel appropriate. I'm happy to leave it in your very capable hands!!!

Many thanks.

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Post 3

Trin Tragula

All done then! This is going to be on the Front Page very soon indeed smiley - smiley

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Thanks Trin - you're a star! smiley - biggrin

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Post 5

Trin Tragula

Hello again, Flame! smiley - smiley I'm now here with the UG version of 'Someone Else's Tragedy'.


Really haven't done very much to it (I think there was one typo, so thanks for that smiley - biggrin). I changed a 'thru' to a 'through' and put a hyphen in at one point.

Shout out if there's anything doesn't meet with your approval smiley - ok

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Post 6


Thanks ever so Trin. Sorry for the slow response - but I've been busy getting ready to return to the the UK for a holiday. So much to do - so little time.

Thanks again,

Flame smiley - magic

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Post 7

Trin Tragula

Hey, no worries - three days isn't that slow smiley - ok

Hope the holiday goes well.

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Post 8


I think this has been the real holiday - but it will be lovely to be home for a few weeks. Didn't have time to get my new short story completed. But I will - in time!


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