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Subbing Arts of Greek Antiquity

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Bluebottle

Hello - I'll be subbing the above, you can subscribe here:
A87922092 Arts of Greek Antiquity - better than nature

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Subbing Arts of Greek Antiquity

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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

smiley - cheers Hi!


Subbing Arts of Greek Antiquity

Post 3

Bluebottle

I've provisionally added a couple of footnotes but can delete them if you want.

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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

Great footnotes, thanks! I didn't know the thing about Napoleon, very intersting. smiley - smiley

Gave the Entry another read-through. I noticed a verb is missing in this sentence (Classic period 1st paragraph last sentence):
The WAS city under the reign of Pericles from 443 to 429 BC, his death brought riots and Sparta defeated Athens in a struggle for supremacy in the area.
(otherwise re-structure the sentence somehow)


Subbing Arts of Greek Antiquity

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Bluebottle

I've tweaked that sentence so hopefully it reads better now.

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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

smiley - cheers thanks

Noticed something else:
also section about the Classic Period, 4th Paragraph
'The sculptors Phidias created the 12-metre-tall Zeus statue in Olympia2, Polyklet created bronze statues as well as a script about perfect male proportions and Praxiteles created...'
I think 'sculptor' should be singular here?


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Bluebottle

Okay, I've changed that sentence.

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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

smiley - ok Thank you!


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Post 9

Bluebottle

Do you have any further comments? Can you have a thorough read-through and let me know if you think it is ready to go on its way? smiley - smiley

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