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Subbing Arts of Greek Antiquity
Bluebottle Started conversation Nov 20, 2018
Hello - I'll be subbing the above, you can subscribe here:
A87922092 Arts of Greek Antiquity - better than nature
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Subbing Arts of Greek Antiquity
Bluebottle Posted Dec 4, 2018
I've provisionally added a couple of footnotes but can delete them if you want.
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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor Posted Dec 6, 2018
Great footnotes, thanks! I didn't know the thing about Napoleon, very intersting.
Gave the Entry another read-through. I noticed a verb is missing in this sentence (Classic period 1st paragraph last sentence):
The WAS city under the reign of Pericles from 443 to 429 BC, his death brought riots and Sparta defeated Athens in a struggle for supremacy in the area.
(otherwise re-structure the sentence somehow)
Subbing Arts of Greek Antiquity
Bluebottle Posted Dec 6, 2018
I've tweaked that sentence so hopefully it reads better now.
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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor Posted Dec 6, 2018
thanks
Noticed something else:
also section about the Classic Period, 4th Paragraph
'The sculptors Phidias created the 12-metre-tall Zeus statue in Olympia2, Polyklet created bronze statues as well as a script about perfect male proportions and Praxiteles created...'
I think 'sculptor' should be singular here?
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Bluebottle Posted Dec 6, 2018
Okay, I've changed that sentence.
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Bluebottle Posted Dec 13, 2018
Do you have any further comments? Can you have a thorough read-through and let me know if you think it is ready to go on its way?
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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor Posted Dec 15, 2018
Very last paragraph:
'The Greek antiquity should inspire many later periods. '
As far as I remember I was told 'should' cannot be use like in German at this place. Also 'the' was wrong here? So probably simply make this 'Greek antiquity inspired many later periods.'
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Bluebottle Posted Dec 17, 2018
Would you like to give a final proof-read?
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