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Bluebottle

Entry: Bang! Zoom! Drone! Deliveries Going Postal to the Isle of Wight - A87984382
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

A splodge

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Ah! I read this a while ago, but I don't know what I did with my comment, sorry. Great title, and I like how it brings different concepts together in one theme smiley - ok

The only comment I had was "Coronavirus to come. Soon after the lockdown began" - perhaps worth adding in just a bit more detail for future reference.

Superb concluding paragraph smiley - applausesmiley - biggrin


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Post 3

Bluebottle

Thanks for reading this portmanteau potpourri, I've given it a tweak. smiley - ok

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

I really enjoyed this one. smiley - smiley

>>Where the Solent is at its narrowest the least populated either side is...<<

This is a very Yoda-like sentence, and hard to understand. Could it be cleared up for the casual reader?

I liked the Congreve rocket bit. smiley - rocket


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Post 6

Bluebottle

I reworded that bit a tad, hopefully it makes more sense now.

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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

Oh, yeah. I get it now! smiley - ok


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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Just reading this again, I wonder what the ferries have crashed into smiley - bigeyes

I also wonder:

‘80 years ago’ is out of date already?

‘Made a U-turn’ - does that give the impression it had control over its trajectory rather than unintentionally going off course?

‘ yet failed to deliver any letters once he arrived.’ - am I right in thinking this means he was not intending to deliver any letters?

The UAV section has a mixture of past and present tense - is there any more news about whether the scheme will be able to go ahead as planned?

Excellent smiley - magic


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Post 9

Bluebottle

Thanks for the comments, I've made some tweaks.

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

smiley - ok


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Congratulations! smiley - bubblysmiley - biggrin


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