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Bluebottle

Entry: The Ultimate Illumination Entertainment Film Guide: 2010-2014 - A87899161
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

An entry on animated films.

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A87899161 - The Ultimate Illumination Entertainment Film Guide: 2010-2014

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SashaQ - happysad - Editor

Good to see this in Peer Review now! smiley - biggrin

I previously commented over here F22152524?thread=8319459


A87899161 - The Ultimate Illumination Entertainment Film Guide: 2010-2014

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SashaQ - happysad - Editor

I'll give this a thorough readthrough as I think it is nearly ready smiley - ok

"Chris Meledandri is a highly-experienced animation producer" - highly-experienced producer

There's quite a bit of repetition in your mention of Blue Sky Studios, and in the paragraph after it - I wonder if you can tighten that up?

Coffine - Coffin

"the most audacious crime of all time, the theft of the Moon" - "the most audacious crime of all time: the theft of the Moon"

In the tables you could include the words Bechdel Test and put the h2g2 link on the first mention

"After an argument he leaves" - "After an argument EB leaves"?

"EB, son the Easter Bunny " - "EB, son of the Easter Bunny "

Maybe note "to date (2018)"

"He has particularly experience with directing" - he has particular experience of directing, or he particularly has experience of directing?

"not be understand" - understood

The superscript thing on Dr Seuss' still annoys my eyes - is it just because the words Dr Seuss appear above the title on the film posters?

"This Is the " ?

"After founding Illumination Audrey Geisel " - I think there is a misplaced clause here!

"The Lomax" - The Lorax

"This is Illumination Entertainment's first musical animation" - this sentence confused me as their other animations have music in - on second reading I see it is a Musical that is animated.

"Mazdas" - Mazda cars, or various Mazda vehicles? When you say 'it', does that mean scenes from the film appeared in Mazda adverts?

Despicable Me 2 was the second most successful animated film of the year after Frozen and the second most successful animated film ever after Toy Story 3 - how is that?

"Al Pacino had originally played the villain, however he left after 'creative differences' six weeks before the film's release date. This led to him being replaced by Benjamin Bratt" - I think the emphasis would be clearer if you could reorder it as something like:

"The villain had originally been played by Al Pacino, but when Pacino left after 'creative differences' six weeks before the film's release date, he was replaced by Benjamin Bratt

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A87899161 - The Ultimate Illumination Entertainment Film Guide: 2010-2014

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Bluebottle

I'm surprised I didn't have the link to Bechdel Test in the entry – I was sure I had but must have confused this entry with one of the others.

The superscript thing on Dr Seuss' still annoys my eyes - is it just because the words Dr Seuss appear above the title on the film posters?
It is not just on film posters but on all the film merchandise and tie-in material. They had it like that on everything conceivable, so if it annoys your eyes I recommend you avoid the Seuss Landing shop at Universal Studios. My use of superscript is positively restrained in comparison…

When you say 'it', does that mean scenes from the film appeared in Mazda adverts?
The film appeared in adverts and also it has been widely reported that Mazda advertising executives went to school to give presentations to children to tell them to get their parents to buy Mazda cars:
http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/magazine-17224775
http://www.fastcompany.com/2679430/mazda-takes-its-controversial-lorax-campaign-to-public-schools (Please note: This is a US website so 'Public School' in this context means 'State School' and does not mean Eton, Winchester College etc, which in the US would be called 'Private Schools')

Despicable Me 2 was the second most successful animated film of the year after Frozen and the second most successful animated film ever after Toy Story 3 - how is that?

'Despicable Me 2' was released in June and on release became the 2nd most successful animated film after 'Toy Story 3'. 'Frozen' was then released in early December and overtook 'Despicable Me 2'. I've added a smiley - footprintssmiley - musicalnote

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SashaQ - happysad - Editor

That's great smiley - ok I understand about the advertising now - audacious indeed...

"is it just because the words Dr Seuss appear above the title on the film posters?
It is not just on film posters"

Is that a 'yes'?

Anyway, that's a minor point - this is looking good indeed smiley - ok


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Post 6

Bluebottle

It's a 'No', it is the official formatting that was used across the board, not just on posters.smiley - tongueout

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