h2g2 The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy: Earth Edition

Entry: My story - A4149849
Author: kanyash - U1597444

hi plese post your comments.i will appreciate that.

Hi Kanyash, and welcome to h2g2.

I think I recognised every emotion you express in this piece. I've been there, and it hurts.

This reads like an outpouring, and is has great power because of that. But what comments do you want? There are some typos, and some places where commas might be removed or changed. If it is a record of your own emotion, and I assume it is, then there is little more that I would add or say because who am I to tell you how to record your emotions. If it is a piece which you want to affect the general reader in a specific way, then there are some observations and suggestions I would make.

Thank you for posting it here. It touched many chords in me. I do have one general comment, which is that broken hearts do heal.

Thank you again for posting it.

Ben

Hi Ben,
Thanks alot for your reply. I am not a native English user, I accept that despite my every effort, many times I fail to use it appropriately. I highly appreciate such comments, which will be of great help for me to improve my writing english. And this is my true story, I am sharing my feelings. And now, I am happy to let you know that, I am with my beloved for ever. My heart is not broken anymore.
With comliments,
Kanyash

That is good news.

Let me know if you want to change the piece or leave it as a momento o f how you felt at the time.

Take care, and good luck.

Ben

I want the content or message of this story to be the same..but if you have any ideas ,,"I mean any words phrases or idoms" to make this story more interesting without modifying its originality......please suggest me...I will love to include those things..Thanks a lot.