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A12481445 - The Edge of Blue
greenieguy Started conversation Jun 14, 2006
Entry: The Edge of Blue - A12481445
Author: greenieguy - U738685
I've never done anything quite so... "mushy" before. Please tell me what you think of it. Its roughly 1,500 words. Enjoy!
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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont Posted Jun 15, 2006
intresting and as you said quite mushy ut a bit pointless
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U1250369 Posted Jun 16, 2006
Oh, it was lovely and mushy.
Enjoyed reading very much
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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont Posted Jun 16, 2006
doo did I
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minorvogonpoet Posted Jun 16, 2006
Well Done. The surroundings are well established, yet without too much description. Lana's self-doubt is convincing, though perhaps too much self-pity. It's a bit predictable, though!
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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont Posted Jun 16, 2006
i agree
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LL Waz Posted Jun 20, 2006
It kept my attention. Like minorVogonpoet I thought it's strength was in the setting.
It could benefit from some polishing - are you a re-writing kind of writer? Or do you store up comments for the next time?
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greenieguy Posted Jun 21, 2006
Generally I use the shorter stories of up to 3000 words as trial runs. I find out what worked, and what didn't, and then take that on board for my longer projects.
Jack
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- 2: miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont (Jun 15, 2006)
- 3: U1250369 (Jun 16, 2006)
- 4: miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont (Jun 16, 2006)
- 5: minorvogonpoet (Jun 16, 2006)
- 6: miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont (Jun 16, 2006)
- 7: LL Waz (Jun 20, 2006)
- 8: greenieguy (Jun 21, 2006)
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