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A12481445 - The Edge of Blue

Post 1

greenieguy

Entry: The Edge of Blue - A12481445
Author: greenieguy - U738685

I've never done anything quite so... "mushy" before. Please tell me what you think of it. Its roughly 1,500 words. Enjoy!


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Post 2

miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont

intresting and as you said quite mushy ut a bit pointless


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Post 3

U1250369

Oh, it was lovely and mushy.

Enjoyed reading very much


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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont

doo did I


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Post 5

minorvogonpoet

Well Done. The surroundings are well established, yet without too much description. Lana's self-doubt is convincing, though perhaps too much self-pity. It's a bit predictable, though!


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miraculousrandomness - being elvised is hard but so is changing your title so I wont

i agree


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Post 7

LL Waz

It kept my attention. Like minorVogonpoet I thought it's strength was in the setting.

It could benefit from some polishing - are you a re-writing kind of writer? Or do you store up comments for the next time?


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Post 8

greenieguy

Generally I use the shorter stories of up to 3000 words as trial runs. I find out what worked, and what didn't, and then take that on board for my longer projects.

Jack


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