A Conversation for Little Richard

A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 21

Noth€r

**didn't we used to have a smiley for ??** think you mean smiley - cheerup (we Brits call it a loobrush)smiley - biggrin

Noth€rsmiley - cheers


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 22

shagbark

no wonder I couldn't find it.
It was categorized under emotions and labeled CHEERUP
I could hardly say Bif Bam A cheerup a bif bam boom smiley - laugh


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 23

shagbark

anything else smiley - biro


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 24

shagbark

neighbourhood spelling updated.


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 25

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

You'll be spelling with English rules naturally soon Shagbark smiley - biggrin


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 26

shagbark

just put it into a spellchedck with UK rules and came up with about eight more changes smiley - winkeye
GB would say I should have done that a week ago.


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 27

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

It's hard to proof read your own writing - your brain sees what it believes to be there. It's a difficult skill and one which I am not good at. I was lucky enough always to have a secretary with an eagle eye when I was a working person.


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 28

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Anything else? Yes, a few tweaks...

Footnote one requires punctuation.

Footnote three, I don't know why it's in italics, or not in the text? And the times are a bit odd:

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as are the dates.

6 June, 2009 St Regis Monarch Beach Resort Dana Point, California, 7 June, 2009 7:00PM B.B. Kings Blues Club New York, New York, 8 June, 2009 7:30PM etc.

Also, where you have full-stops in names, they don't belong:

B.B. Kings Blues Club New York = BB Kings Blues Club New York
St. Regis Monarch Beach Resort = St Regis Monarch Beach Resort
This was followed by a tour with B. Brown = B Brown
etc.

smiley - tea
<>
=
Someone

smiley - tea
<>
should be in italics as it's a quote and the comma after "tornado" needs a space after it

smiley - tea
<> add a colon
<> add a colon

smiley - tea
<>
the footnote is not next to the word

smiley - tea
They would sometimes play on the outskirts of Macon,Ga for ten dollars a night and all the fried chicken they could eat.

In his personal life he did things that attracted the attention of the vice squad that charged him with 'lewd behavior'. The lawyer his mother found got the charges dropped in exchange for his leaving town. Little Richard was no longer welcome in Macon,Ga.

Ga?
Could you write that in full, please? And in both places, after Macon, should be a space, although I doubt you need the "Ga" twice after you typed it out in full, so just remove the "Ga"

smiley - tea
Growing up before the US Civil Rights Movement,and <--- space after the comma

smiley - tea
A Piano player named Esquerita came to the Penniman house and taught Little Richard the piano.

smiley - modThat grates a little, he wouldn't be teaching him how to bang drums, would he? smiley - erm
Suggestion:
A piano [note small letter] player named Esquerita came to the Penniman house and taught Little Richard how to tinkle the ivories.

GB
smiley - galaxysmiley - diva


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 29

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - doh
Talking about me while I was actually proofreading your entry is a little smiley - ghost Shagbark. Her'es another spooky coincidence. I walked along Cleethorpes seafront this morning and took a photo of a stone pelican. What are the odds that I'd log back into h2g2 and find you have pelican in your nametag?
http://picasaweb.google.co.uk/galaxybabe/CleethorpesSeafront#5342324771568458882


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 30

shagbark

That's a nice pelican.
I will get to your changes this afternoon. right now I have to take my wife to the bank (American spelling deliberate smiley - laugh)


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 31

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - yikes
Shagbark you are really scaring me now, *I* went to the bank before I went to the seafront and spotted the new pelican statuesmiley - yikes

smiley - run


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 32

shagbark

smiley - ghost BOO. smiley - nahnah


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 33

shagbark

In a boogie woogie beat he doesn't tickle keys he pounds them smiley - laugh
At any rate I clarified that sentence and made your other changes.


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 34

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

Not all, you didn't. I spotted several missedsmiley - doh

And *I* missed <> Aladdin Hotel doesn't need to be in italics tags. *slaps self*smiley - fish


A45002567 - Little Richard

Post 35

shagbark

smiley - biro
running down the checklist
footnote one
check
footnote 3
check
schedule of concerts which had been cut and pasted from elsewhere
shortened to remove times, dates changed to UK std
BB King and St Regis omitted
check
B Brown no full stop
check
Someone
check
tornado,
check
biography says, McCartney would later say
colons on both check and check
space before deletyed
check
Macon,Ga
Macon Ga
am I going Ga Ga?
not any more
Movement, and
check
ticle the ivories
NOT ON YOUR LIFE.


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Post 37

Lanzababy - Guide Editor

Well done smiley - applause


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Post 38

Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor

smiley - applause

No worries Shagbark, hopefully the sub-ed will sort out the mess that is footnote 3smiley - ok


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Post 39

Not-so-bald-eagle

smiley - discosmiley - discosmiley - disco

congratulations

smiley - musicalnote luuucilllleee smiley - musicalnote


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Post 40

shagbark

Always glad to hear a new voice.


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