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A88032189 - 'Supergirl' - the Television Series

Post 1

Bluebottle

Entry: 'Supergirl' - the Television Series - A88032189
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

smiley - hero

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A88032189 - 'Supergirl' - the Television Series

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SashaQ - happysad

Thanks for writing this up for us smiley - oksmiley - hero

Not something I was familiar with, so this Entry is useful.

The introduction is a bit 'abrupt', for want of a better word - we don't know anything about the Arrowverse here yet, and maybe you can say more about who Supergirl is and what this series is about.

Lots going on in the first sentence of the Plot. What superpowers does Kara have?

The sentence about being sentenced to Fort Rozz would probably benefit from being more than one sentence.

Kara is disgusted about Mon-El coming to Earth, I see (would have different emotions about the explosion of Krypton...).

Who is Jeremiah Danvers? Alex's father? Ah, yes smiley - ok

"Leviathon" - "Leviathan"

The Fan Fare section is fascinating smiley - ok Erica Durance is Kara's mother? Who is Kevin Sorbo in this context?

Not sure I follow the first paragraph of the Making Of section - the company formed from Warner Brothers, CW, commissioned series from Warner Brothers? Oliver Queen is Green Arrow, I see.

One paragraph mentions the conclusion of Supergirl, and the next mentions the fifth and sixth series.

"Superman & Louis" - "Superman & Lois"

Ms Marvel is on Disney+?

Excellent closing sentence - sums things up nicely smiley - ok


A88032189 - 'Supergirl' - the Television Series

Post 3

Bluebottle

Tweaked a bit so hopefully clarifies things.

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A88032189 - 'Supergirl' - the Television Series

Post 4

SashaQ - happysad

Great - thank you smiley - ok

"Like Superman... she was adopted by the Danvers family." - maybe split the sentence, or say 'a family' or something.

"the Covid pandemic having led to the rapid expansion and contraction from online streaming" - I can see how the expansion would impact broadcast TV, but I'm not familiar enough with the contraction to see the impact - is Disney+ also losing subscribers like Netflix has been?

smiley - ok


A88032189 - 'Supergirl' - the Television Series

Post 5

Bluebottle

I've tweaked the Danvers Family sentence and also changed the contraction bit - while Netflix is losing subscribers, online streaming as a whole is growing.

Funnily enough as Warner Bros have just come under new management, a film greenlit under the old owners, 'Batgirl', which apparently cost $80 million to make and has been finished enough to show to advance audiences, has just been junked. They've announced that it will not be released at all, even after all the hype of getting Michael Keaton back playing Batman after decades.

So the new owners definitely aren't holding out for a smiley - hero

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A88032189 - 'Supergirl' - the Television Series

Post 6

Bluebottle

I tweaked the entry and added a new ending.

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