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A87976020 - Sir Derek Bibby - Businessman and Philanthropist

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Entry: Sir Derek Bibby - Businessman and Philanthropist - A87976020
Author: SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad' - U9936370

Here is a little Entry inspired by this month's Create Challenge A87972871 about a man who made a difference to his world with daffodils smiley - chicksmiley - biggrin


A87976020 - Sir Derek Bibby - Businessman and Philanthropist

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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

That was very kind - to memorialise a neighbour. smiley - hug And it's a good biography. smiley - smiley

Do you think you could lead in with the daffodils in some way? Say something along the lines of 'every spring, people who live in the ____ area (or who pass by this street, etc) are greeted with a startling display of daffodils, and they remember Sir Derek Bibby'? Not exactly that, but somewhat along those lines? That way, you're leading with the positive aspect. smiley - snowdrop


A87976020 - Sir Derek Bibby - Businessman and Philanthropist

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Thanks DG smiley - biggrin

Excellent idea - I have reworked the introduction so it has a much better flavour smiley - ok


A87976020 - Sir Derek Bibby - Businessman and Philanthropist

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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

smiley - ok That looks great!


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