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A87948445 - The View Askewniverse Films by Kevin Smith

Post 1

Bluebottle

Entry: The View Askewniverse Films by Kevin Smith - A87948445
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

I'll be honest and say that I am very much leaning towards splitting this entry up and that in its present form it could be considered to be too long, however I thought I'd see what other people think first.

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Post 2

SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

I'll be honest and say I would agree with your inclination - I see this Entry is currently more than 10,000 words long. While it might not be as long as the longest Entry in the Edited Guide, in this day and age it will be better for readers if it is split into at least four pieces that would each take less than 10 minutes to read on average smiley - ok


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Post 3

Gnomon - time to move on

I agree. The content is very much broken up into sections, so it wouldn't hurt it to be divided into separate entries.

I think you should have an overview entry and then an entry for each film, unless the films can be logically divided into super-groups.

Question: is there a Lord of the Rings reference in each film?


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Post 4

Gnomon - time to move on

Should this entry be written in British English?

There are a few things in it which I think are in American English: hockey, suspenders etc.


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Post 5

Bluebottle

Only the one 'Lord of the Rings' reference, I'm afraid.

Suspenders = things worn predominantly by women on legs used to hold up stockingssmiley - huh

I have admittedly used 'hockey' rather than 'street and/or ice hockey' as Smith seems to refer to both. I must admit I don't know whether there are any actual differences between ice or street hockey rather than ice skates or roller blades, but yes it is a different game to hockey. I have added a smiley - footprintssmiley - musicalnote to that affect.

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Post 6

Gnomon - time to move on

I wasn't sure about the suspenders because Americans use the word to mean what I'd call 'braces' - elastic straps that go over the shoulders and hold up a pair of trousers.


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Post 7

Gnomon - time to move on

You might like to add a footnote to the footnote on Papal Infallibility.

Technically the Catholic Church holds that the Pope is infallible only when speaking 'ex cathedra', that is, with the full authority of office. One of the Popes stated that he had no intention of ever speaking 'ex cathedra'.


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Post 8

Bluebottle

Thanks - I've added that now.

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Post 9

Gnomon - time to move on

A film doesn't fail the Bechdel Test if all conversations between women mention a man. It fails if all conversations are on the subject of men.

If there is a conversation between two women characters about a subject other than men, then the film passes, even if the conversation mentions a man.


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Post 10

Gnomon - time to move on

Let me know when you decide whether to split this up or not. Then I can start Peer Reviewing it.


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Post 11

SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

The Bechdel Test website http://bechdeltest.com/ gives

1. It has to have at least two [named] women in it
2. Who talk to each other
3. About something besides a man

so it seems a bit subtle to argue that mentioning a man is not talking about men for the Test...

I like how <BB< has set out the definition that is used in each Entry where the test is applied, so that is clear smiley - ok


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Post 12

Gnomon - time to move on

If the two women are talking about climbing a mountain and they mention that Sir Edmund Hillary climbed the mountain, then that is about a mountain, not a man.


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Post 13

Bluebottle

As the consensus is that this entry is too long in its current form, I think splitting the entry would be a very good idea.

Unfortunately according to my rules to limit the number of my entries in Peer Review, if an Active entry is split into two or more entries, then as it had already been in Peer Review all its constituent parts return to Peer Review, with one entry Active and the others Inactive. In this case that would mean one Active entry and seven Inactive entries arriving in a Big Bang, which if truth be told is quite a lot. However if I try to trickle the entries in one-by-one in a Phased approach it could conceivably take years for them to filter through the Peer Review system, by which time I'd've forgotten all about whichever film I'd written about, so there's no ideal answer either way.

If I add the entries in a Big Bang that'll mean I'm up to 25 entries in Peer Review, and be unable to write any other entry for h2g2 for the rest of the year.

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Post 14

SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

smiley - offtopic But mentioning a man who climbed Everest is still putting the women in the position of talking about a man? I would wonder why the mountain couldn't be talked about by the women without mentioning the men... Anyway, that's by the by...

How about a University Project-style approach, <BB<? You could put all the Entries into the Edited Guide Workshop for Gnomon to review, and then put the page of links into Peer Review, and then all the Entries would be kept together?


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Post 15

Bluebottle

All the entries are already in the Writing-Workshop and the links to the entries are:
A87965815 - The View Askewniverse Films by Kevin Smith  
A87965824 - 'Clerks' - the Film  
A87965833 - 'Mallrats' - the Film  
A87965842 - 'Chasing Amy' - the Film  
A87965851 - 'Dogma' - the Film  
A87965860 - 'Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back' - the Film  
A87965879 - 'Clerks II' - the Film  
A87965888 - 'Jay and Silent Bob Reboot' - the Film  

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A87948445 - The View Askewniverse Films by Kevin Smith

Post 16

Bluebottle

I thought we went down the University project route already? How is this any different, other than it seems like we're now asking Gnomon to do the work of a subeditor without getting a subeditor's credit.smiley - huh

I still think it is perfectly reasonable to mention Sir Edmund Hillary (or Sir Edmund Mountainary, as I think of him) when discussing Everest in the context of climbing up it, though if you were talking about 'what mountain inspired an animated film and has a double-glazing company named after it?' he wouldn't come up. Just like if you were talking about X-rays in detail it'd be perfectly normal for Marie Curie's name to come up, but if you were just having a snapshot of your teeth at the dentist she probably wouldn't.

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Post 17

Gnomon - time to move on

I don't mind doing the work without getting the sub-editor's credit - I already have more than 400 of those.


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Post 18

Gnomon - time to move on

My point about Sir Edmund Hillary is that two women could have a conversation about a woman friend of theirs climbing Mount Everest. The subject of the conversation is their female friend.

If in passing they happen to mention Sir Edmund Hillary, that doesn't cause the film to fail the Bechdel Test - the conversation is not "about a man".



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