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A87964375 - Common Kingfishers

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Entry: Common Kingfishers - A87964375
Author: SashaQ - happysad - U9936370

Here is a little Entry about one of my favourite birds - it is always a treat to see a Kingfisher perching nearby.


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Post 2

Bluebottle

I had another read through and the only thing I was puzzled by was the mention of a third eyelid. Do they have a second eyelid too or, if not, what is the difference between a second and third eyelid?

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SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Thanks for reading smiley - ok

Yes, eyes have upper eyelids, and lower eyelids, so the nictitating membrane of Kingfishers, cats, etc is the third eyelid, but I put it into quote marks to indicate that nictitating membrane is the official term smiley - ok

I also made a tweak to indicate that Kingfishers do not just eat fish, as their name suggests, but they also fish for the fish so Kings are not at risk smiley - ok


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Dmitri Gheorgheni - Not Banned in China

smiley - rofl Very interesting! I didn't know kookaburras were kingfishers. Thanks for the read!


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Post 5

SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

smiley - ok Thank you smiley - biggrin


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Post 6

Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

A good Entry! smiley - smiley
As far as I remember they sometimes make artificial nests for kingfishers to help them breeding.


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Post 7

Gnomon - time to move on

Good entry, Sasha.

You might like to add something about the phrase "halcyon days". Halcyon is the Greek for kingfisher and these peaceful and happy days of times past are connected with the kingfisher. You can look it up.

Some choice of words suggestions:

the fish bones and other indigestible parts are ejected in pellets from the bird's beak
-- this sounds a bit odd. I'd say they cough them up and spit them out.

where up to seven eggs are laid by the female
-- I'd prefer the more active:

where the female lays up to seven eggs

Some nitpicks:

It's normal not to capitalise the names of animal species, even when they are the subject of the Entry, so you should have "common kingfishers" and "house sparrow-sized".
(The scientific species name is capitalised on the first word, as you have done.)

three to four weeks after they hatched -->
three to four weeks after they hatch

smiley - smiley G


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Post 8

SashaQ - happysad and 'slightly mad'

Thanks for reading Gnomon smiley - biggrin

I have added mention of Halcyon Days smiley - ok

I have treated the subject of the Entry as a proper name, so I kept the capitalisation there, but I removed the capitalisation in the other cases smiley - ok

I made the other tweaks, too - 'cough' sounds like it comes from the lungs so I didn't say that, but I hope the sentence is clearer now.

smiley - ok


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