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A87941361 - The Amicus Edgar Rice Burroughs Film Trilogy

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Bluebottle

Entry: The Amicus Edgar Rice Burroughs Film Trilogy - A87941361
Author: Bluebottle - U43530

Oft-overlooked films by a forgotten film studio.

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A87941361 - The Amicus Edgar Rice Burroughs Film Trilogy

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SashaQ - happysad

Good to see this in Peer Review smiley - ok

"Amicus doesn't quite fit into the picture of a plucky British underdog, despite the studio's very existence being owed to more pluck than found at a harpist convention." - a sentence that is almost superb smiley - ok The paragraph explains the pluck, but why isn't it a British underdog?

I like the Sugar Puffs footnote smiley - ok

What is the A Certificate? The certificate that is now PG?

Nargas and Narghas are mentioned in The People that Time Forgot - is one a typo? "incredibly painful" smiley - snork

The two references to the collapse of Amicus could be collapsed into one paragraph smiley - ok

Strong use of quotes, and superb concluding paragraph smiley - ok


A87941361 - The Amicus Edgar Rice Burroughs Film Trilogy

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Bluebottle

Helpful comments there, thanks Sasha – I've tweaked this accordingly. smiley - biggrin

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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

A very thorough summary. Good Entry. smiley - smiley The only thing I don't like is having the plot of the films in a table, but others may disagree.


A87941361 - The Amicus Edgar Rice Burroughs Film Trilogy

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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

... I am now reading your Entry about 'The Land that Time Forgot' and therefore I would suggest deleting your list of dinosaurs from this one. It's just too much for this overview.


A87941361 - The Amicus Edgar Rice Burroughs Film Trilogy

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SashaQ - happysad

Neat tweaks - thank you smiley - ok

That is interesting about the A - reminiscent of how 12A now is that children under 12 can be admitted as long as the parents or guardians judge it to be suitable for their children smiley - ok

Re plots in tables, it is not too bad if the plot is one paragraph, like in the Disney Entries, but I do find it is more difficult to read several paragraphs in that format - the line length is halved, so people's eyes have to do twice as much work...

It would look neat if the plots were in paragraphs above the tables, mirroring the paragraphs below the tables smiley - ok


A87941361 - The Amicus Edgar Rice Burroughs Film Trilogy

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Tavaron da Quirm - Arts Editor

Looking at both Entries again I would take out the quote about Doug McClure in this one as you used the exact same quote in the other Entry and it fits better there. In general maybe try to weed out some more such overlaps and try to keep this Entry as short as possible and leave details to the other. There seem to be quite a few facts about filming the first movie which are in both Entries. Maybe check again what is relevant where.


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