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A87935232 - Make Mine Music - the Disney Animated Classic

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SashaQ - happysad

Entry: Make Mine Music - the Disney Animated Classic - A87935232
Author: SashaQ - happysad - U9936370

This Entry is dedicated to Bluebottle, who kindly gave me this DVD last year. Considering I've had so long to write this Entry it is a bit rushed, to say the least. However, I thought it would be appreciated today, so here it is.


A87935232 - Make Mine Music - the Disney Animated Classic

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SashaQ - happysad

I have updated this Entry so it looks much less rushed now.

This and its companion A87935223 are either a fascinating psychological experiment or I have April Fooled myself smiley - laugh


A87935232 - Make Mine Music - the Disney Animated Classic

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Bluebottle

Feel free to ignore my thoughts, but when reading this (other than 'inpired') I wondered whether:

Should be something to ease the transition from the introduction to explain that you are introducing the component parts of the film?

I can see why you have introduced the entry the way you have in chronological order, which makes perfect sense, but should the introduction concentrate on this film, rather than other films? Is there a possibility of readers being confused?

Incidentally, 'Lambert the Sheepish Lion' is also available on 'The Fox and the Hound' DVD (I think 'Dumbo' would have made more sensesmiley - mammoth) and 'Once Upon a Wintertime' is also on a Christmas compilation DVD whose name escapes me at the moment – I'll get back to you with it later on. smiley - santa I still think it is odd that 'Casey Bats Again' is on this DVD and not 'Make Mine Music'.

<BB<


A87935232 - Make Mine Music - the Disney Animated Classic

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SashaQ - happysad

Thanks <BB< - much appreciated smiley - ok

Excellent points - I have added an introduction and made the chronological discussion a new section smiley - ok I added a footnote on Casey Bats Again, too - good question smiley - ok

I also updated the title, after April Fooling myself earlier in the year smiley - laugh


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